Template:Did you know nominations/Fox Hill Prison

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The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 03:34, 31 December 2022 (UTC)

Fox Hill Prison

• ... that Fox Hill Prison has been said to break "even the toughest of men"? Source: "The Bahamian prison 'has its legacy and reputation of breaking even the toughest of men,' his lawyer said at the time."[1]
  • Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Jia Yuming

Created by Mx. Granger (talk). Self-nominated at 13:20, 27 December 2022 (UTC).

• Article created 21 December. No issues of copyvio or plagiarism. All sources appear reliable. Hook is interesting and sourced. QPQ is done. All set to go! Thriley (talk) 02:49, 30 December 2022 (UTC)

Comment @Mx. Granger and Thriley: without objection I would like to see sections in the article. It is one big paragraph at the moment. I do not think it prevents promotion however. Bruxton (talk) 19:29, 30 December 2022 (UTC)

I added two sections. In looking at the hook, I think we need to clarify that a lawyer said it, because lawyers are often hyperbolic - especially in defense of their clients. Bruxton (talk) 19:36, 30 December 2022 (UTC)

Perhaps a hook related to the actual conditions might be better? I do like the initial hook though, even with attribution it seems best. Thriley (talk) 21:59, 30 December 2022 (UTC)

• How about
  • ALT1: ... that according to an inmate's lawyer, Fox Hill Prison is known for "breaking even the toughest of men"? [2]
  • ALT2: ... that maximum-security inmates in Fox Hill Prison have had to use buckets due to a lack of toilets? [3]

—Mx. Granger (talk · contribs) 00:41, 31 December 2022 (UTC)