Talk:2011–12 Princeton Tigers men's basketball team/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 04:48, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

If I remembered right, I reviewed Harvard when Princeton went to the big dance last year, so naturally with Harvard making it in this year, I'll review Princeton. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:48, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are my issues:

• "With a new head coach for the team and a head coach who is a first-time head coach, the team got off to slow starts." Can be cleaned up. Maybe simply "With a new first-time head coach, the team got.."
  • Done.--
    WP:FOUR) 06:32, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply
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• "game against the 2011–12 Quakers.[12] Princeton's victory " what was the score? It's in the table but no reason not to have it in the prose in this case.
  • fixed.--
    WP:FOUR) 06:35, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply
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• "Princeton's victory enabled it to retain slim 26–25 and 24–23 leads in terms of Ivy League Championships and Ivy League team NCAA Tournament appearances, respectively." I'm a bit confused here. I presume it's meant that Princeton has one more championship than Penn, but if that's the case then this game wouldn't factor in. Perhaps changing it to "enabled them to hold on to slim.." would be better just so it doesn't sound like the game decided the championship.
  • Look at the conference standings. If Penn had won one more game, they would have earned a share of the championship.--
    WP:FOUR) 06:37, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply
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Nothing too major, just mainly the one piece that I can't seem to wrap my head around. I'll put this on hold. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:54, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ah I see now; I was looking at the overall record instead of conference, makes sense. Article passes as GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:05, 24 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]