Talk:Blink (Doctor Who)/GA2
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- Lede
- Only "science fiction" should be linked, not "television"
- What channel did it air on? (BBC)
- Episode director should be added to the lede IMO.
- Everything section should be mentioned in the intro, per WP:LEAD. Thus, I don't see "Filming" anywhere in the lead.
- "In 2009,". I'm guess it is like this for others also, but in general, for everything in the article, that should be no comma as seen in that one example. Those commas are not used in British English, which is what Doctor Who, a British series, should use. Cheers.
- Plot
- Many actors names are missing, which, are, however, in the lead. Please add them to the plot section.
- Unlink DVD rental shop per WP:OVERLINK
- Detective Inspector shouldn't be in capitals, as per MOS:CAPS
- "met with the Doctor", to "meets with the Doctor"
- ":" is unneeded. Replaced with "which was" or something
- Production
- Move the image to the right side, as per MOS:IMAGELOCATION.
- That very above concern being said, move the quote box to the left.
- "In fact". Very unneeded. WP:NPOV
- "What I Did" is used twice in a row. Change h'r up
- "Doctor-Lite" episode of the series?
- "Actress Carey Mulligan appeared in the episode as Sally Sparrow." is nowhere to been seen in the article, or there.
- "[21][12]" should be in order as "[12][21]". Thank you.
- In "Filming", one dab link (Macmillan) is in there, under a reference.
- In "Effects", I see way too many quotes. Consider paraphrasing per WP:PARAPHRASE, and some other guideline or policy; I think
- "Chinese puzzle" is not going to help a reader understand this topic. Thus, unlink it per WP:OVERLINK.
- Broadcast and reception
- "a card reading "One Year Later" was show". What? Huh; that's very awkward.
- "11 May November 2007" awkward again.
- Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:59, 16 August 2012 (UTC)
- "rated the episode 9.1" → gave the episode a 9.1"
- "poll conducted by the BBC". "The BBC" there should be "The British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC)", since it was its first mentioned in the article, it will be like that for first time only. All of this is per MOS:ACRO.
- References
- In Ref. 28, 29, 30, 58, etc., double quotes should be single quotes per MOS:referencing guidelines.
- Watch out for double periods in references, as seen in Ref. 37, Ref. 45, etc.
- Ref. 38's regular - should be an en-dash – per WP:DASH
- UK should be United Kingdom
- External links
- Are half of those links needed? Consider WP:ELNO. Then, one important link, TV.com is missing.
- Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order.
Overall; this is a good article. In great shape, I'll be happy to pass once the above issues are addressed. Great work! dley 03:05, 16 August 2012 (UTC)]