Talk:Brave Fencer Musashi/GA1

I'll be doing this one.--

Lead/infobox

• Change [[action role-playing game]] to [[action role-playing game|action role-playing video game]] to make it clear from the start that this is a video game
• and features voice overs for most dialogue. It also features other role-playing elements - This makes it sound as if voice acting is an RPG element. I'd suggest either changing the wording or removing the mention of voice overs from the lead.
• The final sentence in the first paragraph could be simplified to He searches for the Five Scrolls, which can enhance the powers of his sword, while interacting with people from Allucanet and a nearby village.
• A minor thing, but I'd change the second paragraph a bit to avoid both of them beginning with the game's title - perhaps replace the title with "The game"
• Remove "was" from and was scored by Tsuyoshi Sekito
• You don't need to link Square in the publisher field, as they are already linked in the developer field.

Gameplay

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• but has can also be used to absorb Bincho energy (an MP equivalent) - remove has, explain "MP equivalent" in a way that people unfamiliar with video games and RPGs can understand
• or absorb the enemy's skill. I assume there is not just one single enemy in the game, so it should be changed to "or absorb enemies' skills"
• its real strength lies in Scrolls obtained through the game which imbue Lumina with various elemental properties. almost sounds like a strategy guide here, tone-wise - I'd go with something like "instead, it can be imbued with elemental properties from Scrolls"
• Lumina is primarily offensive but thanks to the five elemental scrolls it gains new skills that facilitate the platforming. - I also wonder if "thanks to" is appropriate tone-wise
• The last sentence is unsourced
• The image caption spells it "Binco" - should it be like that, or with an H as in the prose? Change whichever is wrong.

Plot

• and defeats it crest guardian its crest guardian
• , who was in fact sealed within Lumina and not by Lumina. I don't know what you mean with "within Lumina and not by Lumina". Also, "in fact" doesn't seem to be necessary.
• It is also revealed by Jon the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed - would work better as "Jon reveals that the original Brave Fencer Musashi sealed"
• Furthermore, it was he who Is this Jon or Brave Fencer Musashi?

Development