Talk:Castles in Scotland/GA1

Great, that works well for me. I hope to just check it through on Sunday. Thanks for taking this on.--SabreBD (talk) 18:06, 8 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all the hard work you've put into this (and the other Scottish overview articles you've worked on!); it looks in pretty good shape! I've been through it again and I just have a handful of queries:

Lead

• "During the Wars of Independence, Robert the Bruce pursued a policy of castle slighting." consider linking slighting as some readers may not be familiar with the term (I had to look it up!).

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Middle ages

• "Lise Hull has suggested that the creation of castles in Scotland ..." - I suggest indicating why her opinion is considered pertinent; maybe 'historian Lise Hull'?

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• "Alexander III's early death sparked conflict in Scotland and English intervention under Edward I in 1296, that brought this phase of castle building to an end and began a new phase of siege warfare." Could this sentence be clarified? Is is perhaps the word 'that' which is making it cumbersome?

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• " ... although rarer in England, they rapidly spread across Scotland. Scotland also led the way in adopting the new ..." - Possibly consider re-wording to prevent repeating the word Scotland?

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Renaissance palaces

• "This was followed by re-buildings at Holyrood, Falkland, Stirling and Edinburgh, described as "some of the finest examples of Renaissance architecture in Britain" - described by whom?

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• "Much of this work was planned and financed by James Hamilton of Finnart ..." - I had to do a double take with this wording; could you clarify 'much of this work'? Does it mean the whole of Scotland or just the castles/palaces in certain areas (maybe I'm just being a bit dim).

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Decline

• "Blair Castle was a popular location on account of its landscaped gardens, and Stirling Castle with its romantic historic connections." Could you consider re-jigging slightly as it feels a tad clumsy?

 Done--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Twentieth century to the present

• "Some castles remain in private hands, but most are now owned and maintained by the National Trust for Scotland (founded 1931) and Historic Scotland (created as an agency in 1991). Most of those managed by the National Trust are post-Medieval estate houses that were still in occupation until the twentieth century. Those run by Scottish Heritage include most of the ruined castles and tower houses. Many are open to the public." Scottish Heritage - do you mean Historic Scotland? Also, "most are now owned ..." I'd suggest quoting a figure. Looking at the about.com source, it quotes 129. (personal comment: it probably counts as my own
  WP:OR but I always had the impression many/most are still privately owned! Crimonmogate, Udny Castle, Cairness House, even Cluny Castle
  all spring to mind)

I have done the correction to the organisation title, but not sure about quoting the figure as that includes more than just castles, but I will see if I can come up with something more directly connected.--SabreBD (talk) 18:53, 11 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I can see the book ref is fairly vague about this and I suppose it's a figure that will be subject to change over the years, so fair enough.

SagaciousPhil - Chat 09:06, 12 November 2013 (UTC)[reply

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• Thanks for making those adjustments so promptly!
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