Talk:Clean (2022 film)/GA2

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Nominator: MaxnaCarta (talk · contribs)

Reviewer:

• I am satisfied with this report from Earwig.

Y noted thanks

Lead

• Generally, the lead is too short for a GA. I was also seeing this: The film was shot under the direction of Lachlan Mcleod.
  • The film was directed by Lachlan Mcleod.

Y I'll attempt an expansion. I have changed the wording per your recommendation.

• (Just a suggestion): add "Australia" to the first title: Clean is an Australian 2022 documentary film about the life of Sandra Pankhurst

Y done thanks

Synopsis

• Written like copied. Consider reducing line breaks and adjusting related content

Y re-written parts. This is my own original writing.

• Pankhurst's mother was forced to give her up. A family who did not want her then adopted her. Pankhurst was evicted at seventeen. Pankhurst was male and later married and had children, but the marriage eventually failed once Pankhurst realised she wished to transition.. Might consider reword:Clean portrays the story of a woman, who was forced to abandon her daughter, Pankhurst. After leaving, the child was adopted by another family, though was not necessary. (Can be, "they didn't want a child/him). At seventeen, the male child, Pankhurst was evicted to the street. He sought for life and later, married and had children. Like the agony of life, the marriage eventually failed, when Pankhurst realised the woman he married, wished to transition.

N I re-wrote parts, but this sounds more like a film review than neutral enyclopaedia.

cast

• The cast is too short. Consider merging or removing per
  MOS:CASTLIST

N nothing in that MOS section precludes a short castlist? It states A film may have an ensemble cast, or only a handful of actors. Wikipedia is not an indiscriminate collection of information, so try to name the most relevant actors and roles that are most appropriate for the film:. Seems fine to just list the two primary cast members?

Production

• David Elliot-Jones and Charlotte Wheaton of Walking Fish Productions produced Clean.
  • Consider citing. Or removing

Y cited

• Do we leave that Walking Fish Productions like that. You can at your own discretion, place an in-site-tag for red linking— I do suggest that.

Y I already cited, and I did not red-link this as I dont think it's a notable production company? But I will if you prefer.

• In general, do place an IMDb title as ext link, and any other relevant link.

Y done

Image review

• File:Sandra Film.jpg: I can't find the original link source where this image was gotten: provide one!

Here is the link

• add the link as licensing source at commons. It's editable!

Y Done — MaxnaCarta  ( 💬 • 📝 ) 03:29, 2 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Spot checks: source analysing

• Source2  Done
• Source3  Not done: removed it from the sentence At this time, he had not read The Trauma Cleaner: One Woman's Extraordinary Life in Death, Decay & Disaster book documenting Pankhurst's life, released in 2017 and written by Sarah Krasnostein. It's a primary source and replace with a secondary source.

Y thanks. I removed that source entirely. That entire paragraph is substantiated with the one citation already used.

• Source4  Done I am much concern with their Editorial policy and well cited too.
• Source5  Done
• Source6  Done: replace the shortened "the Guardian" to "The Guardian and link it, since there are other "The Guardian" newspapers!
• Source7  Done
• Fionnuala Halligan of Screen Daily considered the re-enactment scenes to be a negative in the film, calling them a "let down for a cast of characters who are so determinedly real." Link the "Screen Daily".

Y linked

• • • Place source 8 after ...certainly a tribute to [Pankhurst]."

Y Done, thanks!

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