Talk:DJ AM/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:18, 18 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this one soon. JAGUAR 23:18, 18 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"Barker and Goldstein both survived the 2008 South Carolina Learjet 60 crash, which killed the other four people on board" - to clarify, were they the only survivors?

Yes, i've clarified this in the lead.
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"He appeared as himself in the film Iron Man 2, which was dedicated in his memory after his death" - I feel that this sentence should be placed after the one about his death, but if it doesn't work out then it's fine to leave it

Done. I've actually reworded the second paragraph of the lead a fair bit.
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"He also dated Mandy Moore and Jessica Stam" - any indication to when he dated them? Feel free to ignore this

Done. On further inspection the link with Stam appears to be a bit trivial, i'm not sure if I should just remove it but i've left it in for now.
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"After having played for his friends and at private parties for some time, when he was 21 Goldstein got his first paying job as a DJ at an illegal after-hours club in Los Angeles" - I think this would sound better as After having played for his friends and at private parties for some time, Goldstein got his first paying job as a DJ at an illegal after-hours club in Los Angeles at the age of 21...

Done.
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"and the third season of The Simple Life" - during the third season of The Simple Life, as this sounds he appeared in every episode of that season (unless that's true?)

Done.
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"They were transported to the Joseph M. Still Burn Center in Augusta, Georgia" - I'd link one of these for accessibility

Done.
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The final sentence of tributes section is missing a closing quotation mark

Done.
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References

No dead links

On hold

Good work on this article! Once all of the above are clarified then this should be ready to meet the GA criteria. Sorry for the delay too JAGUAR 16:35, 20 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Thank you for addressing them, Freikorp! This looks like it's good to go now.

JAGUAR 14:22, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.