Talk:Djibouti women's national football team/GA1

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Reviewer: Arsenikk (talk · contribs) 20:21, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• The lead could be longer. It should include at least the confederation's name and the opponent and score from their one game.
  • Lead expanded. --LauraHale (talk) 10:26, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• I am a bit concerned about the image as it does not at all show anyone who relates to the team at all.
  • Image removed. It was the only image related to women's football in the country I could find but yeah, probably not good enough so none. --LauraHale (talk) 10:26, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• Does the statement "When high level women's players are developed, many leave the country seeking greater opportunity in Northern Europe or the United States." apply to Djibouty, or Africa in general? Unless women player from Djibouti actually have relocated to the West, it is not really relevant.
  • Applies to African region in general. The source doesn't list which countries African players who immigrated to the wester originated from other than Africa. Can remove. --LauraHale (talk) 10:26, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• What does the sentence about financing actually entail? Is it positive or negative? How does it affect the national team?
  • The financing basically implies it isn't enough to adequately allow for the growth of a national women's programme and a team that can compete internationally. That's a lot of the subtext to many of the sources. It just doesn't state it explicitly in the source.--LauraHale (talk) 10:26, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
• There is a very unbalance in the length of the paragraphs. Single-sentence paragraphs should never be written.

Otherwise looks good. Arsenikk ^(talk) 20:21, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks fine, so I'll pass it. Congrats! Arsenikk ^(talk) 18:31, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]