Talk:FN P90/GA1

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Reviewer: Jackyd101 (talk) 13:15, 23 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there, I have reviewed this article against the

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

• There is a problem with your paragraph structure. The article has a large number of very short, stubby paragraphs, that need to be expanded or merged - they look untidy and under developed. Since many of the smaller paragraphs are on related themes, consider merging the related subjects together or attaching them to larger paragraphs.
• "Meanwhile, FN revised the 5.7x28mm ammunition." - meanwhile is unneccesary and can be removed.

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

• There are a number of areas that need references. I have added ^{[citation needed]} tags where they are required.

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

• It follows the
  neutral point of view
  policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

• It is stable.

  

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have

  fair use rationales

  ):

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail:

Revised 12/23/09

Following your input I made corrections to the article layout and added several citations where your tags were placed. ROG5728 (talk) 20:40, 23 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Great work, I read a bit more and added a comment above. I will finish the read through as soon as I can.--Jackyd101 (talk) 22:03, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

OK, there is one prose issue above, and when that is addressed I will pass the article. For future expansion, I recommend 1) incorporating the external links into the references where possible and where not eliminating all but the official pages 2) providing some reviews of what the gun was like to use from trade magazines and 3) devising some form of table to tidy the section of forces that use the weapon. Regards.--Jackyd101 (talk) 23:43, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I revised the article again to fix the prose issue. The full sentence now reads: "Following the P90's introduction, FN revised the 5.7x28mm ammunition." ROG5728 (talk) 00:08, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I will pass then, Merry Christmas.--Jackyd101 (talk) 00:12, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Good to hear. Thanks. ROG5728 (talk) 00:37, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]