Talk:Hurricane Hermine/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 00:02, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will do.

• "he ninth tropical depression, eighth named storm, and fourth hurricane of the 2016 Atlantic hurricane season, Hermine developed from a long-tracked tropical wave. " when?
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "In preparation of Hermine, multiple tropical cyclone warnings and watches were issued in the Southeastern United States, while state of emergencies were declared in Florida, Georgia, North Carolina, Virginia, Maryland, and New Jersey." link "state of emergencies" to
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• Done--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Storm surge and heavy rainfall along the Florida gulf coast caused significant damage." link to
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• Done--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Similar coastal and freshwater flooding occurred in Pasco County, where 7 homes were destroyed, 305 sustained major damage, and 1,564 received minor damage. " spell out 7 since it is less than 10.
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• Done--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "A tropical wave emerged into the Atlantic Ocean from the west coast of Africa between late August 16 and early August 17.[1] " why is Atlantic Ocean linked?
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• " Wind shear prevented quicker development,[13] although conditions became more favorable closer to the Gulf of Mexico." how? more moist air or lower shear?
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• Did Hermine develop an eye?
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• Yes, but it was ragged--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "States of emergencies were declared in Georgia,[27] North Carolina, Virginia, Maryland, and New Jersey due to the storm.[40] " see above.
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• I linked it the paragraph before that one, where a state of emergency was declared for Florida--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Some locations in Puerto Rico observed 3 to 5 in (76 to 127 mm) of rainfall,[45] causing flooding, especially in Ponce area. " missing a "the".
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• " In Batabanó on Cuba's southern coast, the southerly winds and 8.5 in (215 mm) of rainfall caused moderate flooding.[50]" this sentence implies the southerly winds cause the rain. I don't think this was the case.
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "The resulting power outages affected about 325,000 people,[27] affecting 1% of all homes and businesses in the state.[42] " don't use affected twice in a sentence.
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Hermine was the first hurricane to affect the city since Hurricane Kate in 1985.[42] T" clarify you mean hurricane intensity here and wikilink to 1985 AHS.
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• First to directly impact Tallahassee since Kate. Wikilinked to the 1985 AHS--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Throughout the county, approximately 75 homes or businesses were inflicted major damage, while 60 had minor impact.[59] " weird use of passive voice. Maybe change trhe "had" to "suffered" or "sustained".
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• Done--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Throughout Levy County, 1 structure was destroyed, 68 suffered major damage, and 51 others received minor impact.[59]" spell out one.
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• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Bands of heavy rain associated with Hermine produced rainfall totals of 4 to 8 in (0.10 to 0.20 m)" convert to mm, not m.
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• Good catch--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Tropical Storm Hermine Advisory Archive" to "Hurricane Hermine Advisory Archive".

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

All in all, well written and researched, just a few minor errors here and there.

• Thanks for the review!--12george1 (talk) 00:49, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]