Talk:James Milner/GA2

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Reviewer: IronManCap (talk · contribs) 21:27, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'm interested in taking up this review. For initial comments, some ref work in adding dates and authors to refs is needed; the ProveIt gadget may be helpful here. Also look at archiving all urls using IABot, and find refs for the two ^{[citation needed]} tags in the infobox. Expect further comments in the next 7 days.

 Done have addressed the 2 tags.

Lead

• Move ref #7 next to ref #174 in #Style of play per
  MOS:LEADCITE
   Done
• has been used → has played - as who used him (managers, presumably) haven't been mentioned  Done
• represented his school - mention the specific school here  Done
• Not sure him being a Leeds season ticket holder is notable enough for the lead, I would cut that  Done
  • I would also merge the sentences about him supporting Leeds and joining their academy  Done
• aged only 16 - rm "only" per
  WP:VOICE
   Done
• Add "award" after PFA Young Player of the Year  Done
• Link free transfer to
  Vice-captain (association football)
   Done

Early life

• Yorkshire Schools cricket team - Link Yorkshire  Done
• other clubs in the north → other clubs in Northern England  Done
• what Milner aspired to do; that is, to come through the academy and play for the first team → what Milner aspired to do, in coming through the academy and playing for the first team  Done

Club career

• One BBC source doesn't justify "widespread praise from commentators" - I would remove "widespread" at the bare minimum  Done
• the chairman of the club at the time - who?  Done
• Preferably remove instances of "even" per
  WP:VOICE
   Done
• extreme right of the field → far right of the field  Done
• "Winger" should not be capitalised  Done

• Shortly before the end of his loan period, negotiations between Villa and Newcastle began. - needs a source  Done I have removed it as, after a look I feel it is adequately covered in the paragraph below.

• Move the second image (the free kick one) to the left so it faces the text per
  MOS:IMAGELOCATION
   Done
  • Also link
    WP:DUPLINK
     Done
• Add commas after at 16 years and 356 days and and its new manager  Done
• Allardyce praised Milner highly - rm "highly" per
  WP:VOICE
   Done
• it was rumoured in May 2008 that he would - replace "he" with "Milner"  Done
• Link
  transfer request
   Done

• Milner continued to impress and scored his second league goal of the season against Blackburn Rovers on 7 February and scored a free kick from outside the penalty area at home against Everton as Villa came back from a 3–1 deficit to draw 3–3 on 12 April. This sentence needs c/e and some commas, potentially split it out  Done
• Link free kick in #Aston Villa, delink in #Style of play.  Done

• Man City section is well-written.

• Vice captain → Vice-captain  Done
• Link
  Roma
  .  Done
• Add "season" after during the 2020-21  Done
• Reword the opening sentence of the last para of the L'pool section to something like Milner was not a regular starter during the 2020–21 season, amassing just 11 starts and making 26 appearances overall.  Done
• As a result he registered his first goalless season of his career. → As a result, he registered the first goalless season of his career.  Done

International career

• Add a comma after "2003 World Youth Championship"  Done
• he also set up - "also" is unnecessary here  Done
• had a penalty well saved - rm "well" per
  WP:VOICE
   Done
• sail over the crossbar → go over the crossbar  Done

• the Netherlands → the Netherlands  Done
• however he was substituted → although he was substituted  Done
• Where he started but - rm "where"  Done
• However Milner failed to secure a starting place. Only appearing once, in the final group game against Costa Rica after England had already been eliminated. - This needs c/e and sourcing
• The paragraph beginning Milner was part of the England squad for EURO 2016. needs some serious c/e for grammar

@REDMAN 2019: Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed these two points myself, and am hence passing the article. IronManCap (talk) 20:08, 13 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Style of play

• I would move the image to the left and quote box to the right so the image faces the text per
  MOS:IMAGELOCATION
  and alternates with the last one  Done
• Link Manuel Pellegrini  Done
• who managed Milner at Manchester City, described Milner → who managed Milner at Manchester City, described him  Done
• Add a comma after in the modern game  Done
• Rm the colon in the last sentence  Done

Refs

• Mark The Daily Telegraph and The Times refs with |url-access=limited  Done
• Please be consistent if possible with |work= vs |publisher= for BBC Sport; the former is preferable per
  WP:ITALICWEBCITE
• Please add any missing authors using |first=, |last=, and if necessary, |author-link=

Other comments

• Career statistics and honours sections look good.
• Earwig suspects a copyvio of this website, although that is a low-level website that is almost certainly a
  WP:Wikipedia mirror
  . It also has weird line breaks within prose, almost certainly to avoid copyvio detection on its part, so no concerns here.

I asked about that website before nominating and was told that it shouldn't be a problem. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 12:44, 5 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

• WP:DUPLINKs
  .
• Good to see
  MOS:NUMBER
  being followed.

Those are my comments. Ping me when addressed. IronManCap (talk) 13:42, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( lists ): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism ): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have suitable captions ):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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