Talk:Lewis Galoob Toys, Inc. v. Nintendo of America, Inc./GA1

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Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 08:10, 3 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Good news, I also don't usually get to these on time. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 08:10, 3 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Here we go! You've had my review schpiel before but basically, I'm open to discussion on all suggestions, and I won't fail on a single point unless something would cause a fail of the GACR.

Lead & Background

• "Although the courts granted a enjoined the Game Genie from being sold" I think you're missing something here
• "extending with new versions" feels awkward. Maybe something like, "and the product line was extended with versions for other consoles"?
• Can we get years for the other suits mentioned?
• "this case was distinguished by courts" is distinguished used as legal jargon here? Otherwise it doesn't seem to fit.
• Year for Treasure Island as well?
• I think the single-sentence paragraph at the end of Background could be part of the previous paragraph, but I won't fight you on it

Legal dispute

• Years for other suits again plz, for the next section too
• "The dispute was not resolved until a trial." I think this can just be "until trial". Or maybe just add "and the dispute proceeded to trial." to the end of the previous sentence
• "personal use, Nintendo" this needs a semi-colon, not a comma
• The trial is described as lasting "over a year" but later it says they were prohibited from selling for an "approximately one-year period". Can the earlier wording be tweaked for consistencey? Trial was July 90 to July 91, so I think "approximately a year" is more accurate than "over a year"

Impact and legacy

• I think we need a smidge of context for ReplayTV - maybe "DVR service ReplayTV"?
• "The issue was raised again..." when?

Overall, a very solid article with minimal issues. Sourcing good, no concern about POV or CV. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 08:43, 9 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

• Thank you for the review. The comments were all helpful and they should now be resolved after my edits. Jorahm (talk) 20:34, 13 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  Aaaa sorry I forgot to come back and close this out. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 19:38, 15 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]