Salutations! I'll be the reviewer of this nomination. It is worth noting that this will be my first (non-instant fail) review. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:57, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Good Article
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Discussion
Lead
As this is a character, change "that appears" to "who appears". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Specify that this is "Walt Disney Animation Studios' 60th animated feature film". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Partly done: The studio is an animation studio (as specified in its name) and therefore only produces animation, so "animated" would be redundant and repetitive.
Ah yes, that's correct. Optionally, if you're like me and like when multiple articles are consistent, you can remove the "Animated" in "Animated Pictures" and add "animated" back into "feature film". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The comma before Encanto is not strictly necessary grammatically, though not wrong either. Removing it would bring the article in line with similar articles, such as Mulan or Aurora, Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done: Though it would be consistent, it would also be a
Oxford comma. As such, it should be added after "emotional" in "imperfect, quirky, emotional and empathetic". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply
]
Done
Add a comma after "gift" in "desperately searching for a gift but the character's motivation". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Stephanie Beatriz should be noted as the voice actress earlier in the lead. Perhaps as: "Voiced by American actress and singer Stephanie Beatriz, Mirabel is depicted...". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Forgive me for asking, but why? I do not think the fact that Beatriz voices her had that much effect on her depiction...
Per
Wikipedia:WAF, articles like these should keep their focus on a real world perspective. As such, I believe Beatriz's voice probably has the largest effect—aside from the animation itself—on her in-film depiction. In fact, now that I think about it, the second paragraph of the "critical response" section could be expanded to be slightly longer. At the moment, it's mostly just a list of terms describing the performance. Maybe consider expanding it to be about as long or slightly shorter than the first paragraph by making it less list-style. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply
]
"Critics praised the character and Beatriz's performance". Expand on what aspects they praised. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Also add a bit on what was praised about the voice actress' performance. The "critical response" section has a list of terms you could use. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Mirabel has also been discussed among therapists". What did they discuss? Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Attempted to expand
As this is the lead, no citation is needed so long as its referenced in the text itself. With that said, can you tell me where in the text the "unite her family" part appears? The note about awards should also be made into its own sentence, maybe with a mention of who was awarded—actress, animators, etc—without naming the awards themselves. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Development
The first sentence sounds wonky and could perhaps be split into two. Maybe start with "During the production of Zootopia (2016)..." or something to that extend. Miranda's involvement would do well to be made into its own sentence. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've tried splitting the sentence, but it just kinda feels off to me... so I kept it whole...
That's good enough, though "director" should be plural as there are two of them. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The comma after "families" in "large extended families" is unnecessary here. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Remove the Encanto wikilink from "her family" and add it to the beginning of the sentence where the film is directly named. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Per
MOS:LINK, Colombia probably shouldn't be wikilinked. However, it may be important enought here to warrant an exception. I'll leave that up to your discretion. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply
]
I don't think MOS:LINK is part of the GA criteria anyways, so I'll leave it as it is
It is unclear what "position" means in "the vulnerability of Mirabel's position". Perhaps there is a better word or framing that could be used here. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The quote by Charise Castro Smith is difficult to understand. I better formatted it for you: Mirabel's position is "complicated and awkward and just utterly human and relatable [in] that [she] feel[s] like ... the unspecial one amongst everyone else who’s special and perfect and has it all figured out." Furthermore, the quote should be cited in the adjacent reference using the "quote" parameter. As citation six is used two other times in the article, it's fine to create a new identical citation that also includes the quote. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Is there a guideline/policy that specifically mentions this? The closest I can find is
WP:FQ
...
You're correct, my mistake. I usually work on articles with Spanish sources, meaning that any time a quote is translated to English, the original Spanish quote needs to be placed in the citation. As all quotes here are in English, they don't need to be added to the citation. Castro Smith's quote is still difficult to understand though, and needs to be changed for clarity. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add "that" after "said" for "said that as a magical realism film". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
As a Spanish word, "Mira" should be italicized. Also, quick note as a Spanish speaker: "Mirar" means "to look". "Mira" only means "look". This is noted in citation ten. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
As mentioned with an identical sentence earlier, there should be a comma after "gift" in "searching for a gift". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
While "her motivation to be noticed" works, I personally found it a bit hard to understand. Perhaps replace "motivation" for "wish" or something to that extend. Also, add "that" to "stated" for "stated that her". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add "of the film" to "one version". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add "the" before "third act" for "start of the third act". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Voice
I don't think the fact that Beatriz watched many Disney films as a child is particularly notable; pretty much everyone has. Perhaps remove this and keep the fact that she describes herself as a fan. If you want, you can include her statement that she's a "deeply, deeply invested Disney adult" as that is more notable. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed
Add "its film" after "setting in Colombia" for "setting its film in Colombia". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Added
Add a comma after "Luisa" for "auditioned for Luisa, but". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Maybe replace "knew" with "decided"; that's optional. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "young" for "sound young, so she". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add that citation seventeen requires a paid subscription using the "url-access level" parameter. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add the quoted material into citation eighteen.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "directors" for "the directors, but on some occasions". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
The final sentence for this section sounds a bit wonky. Perhaps remove "her finding a way to" and replace it with "helping her" for "she credited for helping her to". As mentioned before, long quotes like these should be cited on the corresponding reference.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe split the first sentence or add a better transition. I found that replacing "and later hired her" with "later hiring her" did the trick.
Done
A comma after "curly" might be unnecessary. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done: According to this (I haven't the foggiest on its reliability), it seems fine as it is
I wasn't entirely sure one way or another. A quick check on Grammarly states that either way is fine. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The first and second sentences both use citation twenty-one. As there are no citations in between, the first one can be removed. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
The comma after "Zhao" is unnecessary. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
The semicolon after "Mirabel's hair" is pretty abrupt. Replacing it and "they" with "and" for "and were inspired" flows better. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
"Casita" is a Spanish word and should be italicized here and in all future appearances. As Casita is the house's name, there may be an exception here. However, if that is the cases, instances where "the Casita" is used should be edited to remove "the". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "Casita" for "connects her to the Casita, so her outfit incorporates". 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)
Done
"Region" is used twice in a row. This can be fixed by just saying "the Andes" or even "the Colombian Andes". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Alpargatas" is a Spanish word and should be italicized. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
The word "skirts" is repeated several times in succession. Replacing "traditional Colombian skirts" with "designs" could help alleviate this. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed No reply here but I saw that the issue was addressed. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add a wiklink for Isabela at first mention of her in the text. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done This still needs to be addressed. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:25, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Move "according to Screen Rant" to the beginning of the sentence. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
"And" in "her lack of resentment and envy" is unnecessary here. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed
"Sown" is incorrect. Use "sewn". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
How did I get there...
Replace the semicolon in "according to Bush" with a colon. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "journey" for "her journey, and". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done?
Citation thirty-four should include the quote.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
See above
The fact about her name meaning "look" is repeated here. Remove if from either this paragraph or the original depending on where you think it fits best, but don't keep both. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Encanto
Large parts of this plot summary lack citations. However, I've notice that other good articles—such asSnow White and the Seven Dwarfs (1937 film)—also do not include citations for the plot summary. Is there an exception here that I'm not aware of? Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Yes:
MOS:FILMPLOT
... and others. The sourcing is only used to cite things that may be considered interpretation
Add a comma after "change" for "change, and everyone". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:16, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
"Abuela" is a Spanish word and should be italicized. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "everyone" for "warns everyone, but the cracks". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "disappear" for "cracks disappear, and". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add a comma after "dying" for "miracle is dying, and she". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
In note B, remove the wikilink to Colombia. Whether or not you decided to keep or remove it earlier, either way it would either be unnecessary or repeated. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
In note B, add a comma after "miracle" for "By a miracle, the candle". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
In note B, separate the third sentence into two at the "never go out" point. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
In note B, add a comma after "burn" for "continues to burn, and". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add "that" after "rumor" for "a rumor that he had a vision". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add "that" after "reveals" for "reveals that she struggles". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Remove "that she" before "never" as it is unnecessary. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Specify who Mariano is as he hasn't been mentioned before. Keep it short though. Actually, remove mention of it entirely as it's unrelated to Mirabel's arc. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed
Remove "less perfect" as the phrasing is odd. "Truer to herself" works fine. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed
Remove the comma after "rest of the family". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Remove the comma after "enough for Alma". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Add a comma after "candle" for "save the candle, but". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
Sentences two and three of the final paragraph can be combined. Consider "reconcile and return". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done
The phrasing in "recognizing her family's powers as the miracle instead of their existence" is odd; consider rewriting. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Attempted
"Takes" not "take" a group photograph. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The differences between British and American English really confuse me
Merchandise
"In" December rather than "by" December. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The second mention of "Mirabel Singing Doll" can just be replaced with "doll". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I did some digging around for the actual products and the Disney doll that sings "The Family Madrigal" and the Jakks Pacific Large Doll are two different products. The cited source's text is a bit unclear as to which product is which, so perhaps a different source could be used. Lzer (talk) 07:48, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
You can replace "the Mirabel Singing Large Doll, sold by" with "a separate doll sold by". That would suffice I think. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 16:00, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Done: I couldn't find good enough sources to change the ref, but I also thought on my own to replace the wording. It looks like Pamzeis went ahead and finished this part of the section. Lzer (talk) 12:00, 10 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The quote needs to be in the citation.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Critical response
Brian Truitt's quote should be in the citation. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
IGN's quote should be in the citation.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Impact
I forgot to mention earlier, but per
MOS:ELLIPSIS, a non-breaking space () should appear before each ellipsis. See the manual of style for details. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply
]
Non-breaking space is present using the nbsp; character reference. Lzer (talk) 07:48, 7 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The quote by immigrants should be in the citation.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add "that" before "despite" for "stated that despite attempting". Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
José María Luna's quote should be in the citation.Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Works cited
A link to The Art of Encanto would be nice. The one on Google Books would do, though another official source works. Obviously, illegal pirate PDFs shouldn't be added. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 05:42, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
You're almost all set! All that's left is the final unaddressed points here and a few above. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 02:38, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Optionally, you can remove "(2021)" from the caption as it wraps to a second line. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 00:54, 6 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nowhere in the article is Noemi Josefina Flores cited as Mirabel's younger actor. It's worth adding a sentence with a coinciding citation in the "voice" section or at the very least in the infobox.
Done I used an official document from the Oscars. Shiva Baby uses the same source. Lzer (talk) 01:12, 13 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
My understanding is that Félix is Pepa's husband. As such, he would be Mirabel's uncle-in-law, not her uncle. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 06:15, 5 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Per our article on uncles, I believe "in-law" is not necessary. Pamzeis (talk) 12:23, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
References
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footnotes
can be used for in-line citations, but not both in the same article.
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^Vandalism reversions, proposals to split or merge content, good faith improvements to the page (such as copy editing), and changes based on reviewers' suggestions do not apply. Nominations for articles that are unstable because of unconstructive editing should be placed on hold.
sound clips
, are also covered by this criterion.
^The presence of images is not, in itself, a requirement. However, if images (or other media) with acceptable copyright status are appropriate and readily available, then some such images should be provided.
Pass
Done
Partly done: The studio is an animation studio (as specified in its name) and therefore only produces animation, so "animated" would be redundant and repetitive.
Not done: Though it would be consistent, it would also be a MOS:SOB
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