Talk:Outrageous Betrayal/GA1

Good work.

1. The lengthy list of books in Note 6 seemed a bit unnecessary; perhaps cut it down to two or three of the most notable books or authors.
2. I've never seen the superscripted page number format used in the lawsuit section ([1]:279). Is that a typo?
3. There was info in the
   WP:LEDE
   about "claims that est graduates had made" that I didn't see in the article. I removed it from the lede; maybe you'll wanna put it in the article's body somewhere.
4. The whole article felt... very slightly... loose in its organization and focus. You may wanna run ith through
   Ling.Nut (talk) 14:42, 20 November 2007 (UTC)[reply
   ]

• Thank you! I will begin to address these helpful suggestions you have made, and note them here, below. Cirt (talk) 21:13, 20 November 2007 (UTC).[reply]

1.  Done - I took a few referenced sources out of that citation.
2.  Done - I removed the superscripted page number, mention of the section of the book itself is enough.
3.  Done -
   Ling.Nut (talk · contribs
   ) already took the initiative to fix that issue in the Lead/Intro.
4.  Done - For sure, the next step will be
   WP:PR
   to get some more ideas on improving the quality of this article. Thanks for all your help and pointers!

Cirt (talk) 03:52, 21 November 2007 (UTC).[reply]