Talk:Sora ga Suki!/GA1

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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 00:34, 19 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

What can I say - I like bishounen, and I like reading about comics history, so here I am again. Should hopefully not take too long, but ping me if I haven't returned with a review a week from now.--Alexandra^IDV 00:34, 19 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

• I would expect the sequels to be mentioned in the lead - and speaking of, rewrite Noel! in title case per
  MOS:ALLCAPS
  • Done.
• Do we want to mention that Montmartre is part of Paris? Same upon first mention in the plot section.
  • I don't think it's strictly necessary in the lede.

Plot

• I'll assume good faith on the accuracy, as I haven't read the series.

Development

• Takemiya selected Paris as the setting for the series; at the time, she had developed an interest in Paris and was collecting film soundtracks of movies set in the city.[5] As Takemiya had never been to Paris, uses the word "Paris" a lot in quick succession - I would at the very least change the last one to "As Takemiya had never been there"
  • Revised.
• incorporate its customs and culture - I would consider switching these around, so that you can link "its culture" rather than just "culture", avoiding the impression that the link might lead to the article "culture"
  • Done.

Release

• I guess that this is really more of a question for that article, but I have been wondering: why do we not refer to
  MOS:JAPAN#General guidelines
  says: For transliterations from katakana, use the English spelling if available (e.g., Thunderbird (サンダーバード, Sandābādo) instead of just Sandābādo)
  • That's a good question, and I wasn't aware of that specific policy. If that's the case, it likely makes sense to move the page to Sunroom Nite.
• The footnote doubles up on "「quotation marks」" - I really don't think you need both, and would remove the inner Japanese marks.
  • Done.