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  • talk) 03:08, 12 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I'll address these issues later today. Thanks for your time. – sgeureka tc 07:09, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
All points addressed except for the last one, which will be handled at Commons:Commons:Deletion requests/File:Milky way stargate with very detailed glyphs2.svg. – sgeureka tc 17:18, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
It would be a shame to lose this image as it appears to be the only version of the Milky Way stargate design on Wikipedia that has all of the glyphs properly oriented (bottom of glyph to center of gate). 198.183.6.22 (talk) 18:58, 12 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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  • As explained in the series' backstory, the Goa'uld transported human slaves from Earth to other habitable planets across the galaxy thousands of years ago and now pose as gods of Ancient Earth mythologies, particularly Egyptian mythology. - Didn't they also pose as gods thousands of years ago?
    talk) 15:13, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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To my knowledge, the show never clearly explains when the Goa'uld started posing as gods. Probably the farthest flashback is in the feature film when the alien-to-be-Ra kidnaps the human boy to use him as a host, but it's not entirely clear if the alien already posed as Ra back then. – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I guess I'm thinking of the alternative timeline when SG-1 goes back to ancient Egypt.
talk) 02:20, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Rewritten to "rogue agents of a shadowy intelligence agency on Earth, the
NID, repeatedly attempt to take control ..." – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Much better.
talk) 02:26, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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The Actor as Character style is the de facto list style for cast information per
WP:MOSFILM. – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Are they the Bible? :) I tend not to pay attention to non-binding guidelines like that, especially when they make articles more confusing, but do what you want here.
talk) 02:26, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Completely rewritten for clarification. The sentence was technically correct since Jackson's sacrifice was lethal ("
Lethal is something that is capable of causing death to a living being"), but the implication that Jackson actually died is incorrect because of a sci-fi twist, so the reader never actually heard of Jackson's death first here either. – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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The new version is much better - thanks.
talk) 02:26, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I don't understand your question ("would have had" in what respect?). Even nowadays, it's still somewhat common in my country to air American TV shows in 4:3 although they've been filmed in 16:9 for ages. Showtime probably aired SG-1 in 4:3 in 1997-2002 because wide-screen TV sets were uncommon back then, so their behavior doesn't strike me as unusual. Why SG-1 was filmed in 16:9 from the beginning - I don't remember ever hearing or reading an explanation for this. – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm afraid I don't even know what this distinction (16:9 vs. 4:3) means, so some sort of explanation as to what it indicates and what the differences might mean for the viewer would be helpful.
talk) 02:28, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Found source to clarify transition from 4:3 to 16:9. See Article.
talk) 04:46, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I watched the DVD extra again, but it seems Hudolin's explanation is more ambiguous than the notes I once took (which served as the basis of the article). I've remove the sentence because I don't currently know where I could find a replacement source. – sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • For the design of the Ori and the Priors in season 9, the art department looked at Japanese and Samurai for costuming. - Japanese and Samurai what? These adjectives require a noun!
    talk) 15:13, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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User:Black Sabre clarified it as "the art department looked at Japanese and Samurai garments for costume design". – sgeureka tc 06:21, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Expanded to say "Art director James Robbins found the face painting, scarification and burns of remote jungle tribes mystical, , serving as inspiration for the face scarification of the Priors and the Doci." – sgeureka tc 06:21, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Composer Joel Goldsmith adapted David Arnold's Stargate feature film score for SG-1's opening title theme, which remained the same during the run of Stargate SG-1 and its direct-to-DVD films. - This seems to be covered in the "Music" section already - does it also need to be covered in the "Opening sequence" section?
    talk) 15:13, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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While it could technically be considered redundant, repeating it is also helpful because readers may just want to read certain sections in long articles and skip the Music section. Other shows have different music composers and opening titles composers, so it's not clear that the relevant info might be found in the Music section. Lastly, as a reader, I'd simply expect to read about the origin of the opening titles theme in a section called "Opening title sequence". One sentence of redundance is a good trade-off. – sgeureka tc 06:21, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I agree that readers might skip to only one section, but this article is already quite long and detailed. Some redundancy might have to be sacrificed.
talk) 15:25, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I've thought this through again but come to my old conclusion that it should be left like it is. The "Music" section could go without a mention of the main title score much better than the "Opening title sequence" section, but then the End title score (which can't be moved to the OTS section) would be all alone in the "Music" section and read off instead. I can't lose the redundancy and make it work. – sgeureka tc 00:22, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Ok.
talk) 03:19, 28 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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For the writing of this article including this section, I used up nearly all sources I already own (lots of magazines and DVDs), or could research for free. Expansion is possible with a few books like Stepping Through the Stargate and Reading Stargate, but I don't intend to spend money on my GAs. Additionally, the article already is 100kB (Mythology of Stargate is set up as the respective subarticle), and as a scientist, Themes aren't my strongest suit anyway (both in interest and non-rambling writing). – sgeureka tc 06:21, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
There are entire books on this series that haven't been used in this article? This is a serious deficiency in my opinion. Have you tried getting the books through interlibrary loan from your library? Have you tried getting them from other Wikipedians interested in Stargate? Have you asked other Wikipedians interested in Stargate to work on this section? (For example, one of the books is available from my library. I could check it out and send it to you.)
talk) 15:31, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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By using some books and writing two paragraphs on this topic, I felt and feel the broadness requirement of
WP:STARGATE or several SG forums/communities before on occasion, but have always had problems getting the kind of responses I was hoping for. Unless you really want to go through the pain and send me a few scanned pages from library books (forget postal mail), I'd just wait and see what usable books turn up on eBay and amazon marketplace eventually. – sgeureka tc 00:22, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I'm going to look at the book available at my library and see. Since this section does not actually focus on the themes of the show, but rather its mythology, I think that is really missing some key elements.
talk) 03:19, 28 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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The answer is, SCI FI denied to comment for the most part besides this (probably to appease angry fans). Meanwhile, Variety (of course) mentioned the radically dropped ratings; Multichannel News mentioned dropped ratings, age, expensive production, bad exchange ratings, and lack of promotion; GateWorld mentioned dropped ratings, lack of promotion, removal of anchor show Battlestar Galactica, and new competition as possible reasons for the cancellation. I think I could pull up some interviews where the producers vaguely said it was a mix of reasons. But there was no official explanation.[1]sgeureka tc 06:21, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Well, we should include some of this reporting. "Official reasons" are usually bogus anyway (politicians always say they are leaving to be "with their families", for example). The three sources you mention have some overlap - why not mention at least the drop in ratings?
talk) 15:35, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Expanded. I used Variety and Multichannel News (Multichannel News were the first to report the cancellation). – sgeureka tc 00:22, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "Broadcast and release" section feels overly detailed to me. This is the only time that I got bogged down in the article. Is it possible to cut this down a bit? Here are some examples:
    talk) 15:13, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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It used to be even longer, and 4 paragraphs for a diverse 10-year US broadcast&ratings history was the best I could do as a years-long broadcast and ratings freak. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Although Stargate SG-1 received almost no media mention outside hard-core science fiction circles, the show was consistently the most-watched program (including theatrical movies) on Showtime - Perhaps this should be incorporated into the "reception" section?
The first part of the sentence already was in the Reception section, so I cut that part. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Do we need all of the details about syndication?
I don't know. It would take an American to judge the necessity of US syndication. International syndication is already very brief for its scope and relative weight. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sci Fi switched the broadcast of SG-1 to widescreen and aired new episodes of Stargate SG-1 in the 9 p.m. Friday slot between The Dead Zone and Farscape.[35][93] Meanwhile, older SG-1 episodes aired on Sci Fi in a four-hour block every Monday at 7 p.m. and once a week in US syndication six months after their premiere on Sci Fi. - Can this be cut?
I took out the widescreen mention since it was already noted before in the article, but in what slot a show aired seems like the entire purpose of a Boradcast section. The mention of The Dead Zone and Farscape may be of interest since tweo Farscape actors joined SG-1, but I'd be fine if you want to remove that too. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "Home video release" subsection, in particular, seems overly detailed.
I removed some numbers because they may indeed have been overwhelming/confusing. However, part of the confusion is because the British DVD releases were a mess (SG-1 was one of the first TV shows to be released on DVD, and the distributers were still trying to figure out what works best). Additionally, 4 of the 5 FAs (
Arrested_Development_(TV_series)#DVD_releases) with shorter runs and much clearer season-only releases have more detailed DVD descriptions. Only Doctor_Who#Viewership is shorter (reason unknown). I also believe that 2 paragraphs are better than keeping this article around. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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The present reviews for the pilot episode were the only usable ones I could (still) find online. I have many sci-fi magazines with episode reviews for SG-1 beginning with season 5, but they don't really focus on the series as a whole and usually lack the scholarly out-of-universe detachment. I can't access my books at the moment, but I don't remember anything usuable there or I'd have punched up this section already. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'll try to look at all of the sources later today.

talk) 15:13, 13 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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As a fan of Stargate, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this article. When it comes to GA, I think three things need to be addressed: 1) the images; 2) the "Themes and allusions" and "Critical reception" sections; 3) and the sourcing issues. I am therefore placing this article on hold. I would also suggest that, in the future, you have someone unfamiliar with Stargate read the plot section to see if they can follow it. :)

talk) 05:20, 14 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I have responded to the source questions, but will have to leave the prose issues for later (probably tomorrow). Thank you very much so far for your thorough review. – sgeureka tc 11:22, 14 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'd love to do a thorough job with the article, but I am very busy in real-life at the moment (unfortunately, I was unable to predict this when I put the article up for GAN). I may not be able to address all issues in the 7-day-on-hold time limit, so if you're unwilling to extend the limit for a few days, I'd also be fine with a failed GAN for the time being. – sgeureka tc 22:29, 17 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm definitely willing to extend the limit. I'm only working on Wikipedia for a little bit each day (I'm attempting to finish my dissertation), so I can respond a little bit every day. How about that?
talk) 04:14, 18 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Thank you so much for bearing with me. It seems I managed to take the last major hurdle for my job deadline today, so I'll try to have your concerns addressed by tomorrow evening.sgeureka tc 15:10, 20 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Not a problem at all.
talk) 02:30, 22 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Note to anyone who comes by: this is an active review and the article is still on hold as it is actively being improved! :)
talk) 15:36, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Okay, I'll move to the other side of the country in a few hours and I don't know when I can get back an internet connection. It could be tomorrow in the best case, Tuesday (if my boss allows it after work), or in one or two months worst case. Please do what you feel is best for the article. I don't want to hold up wiki procedure more than I already have. (Things can still be improved when I can devote more time to it than now.) Thank you. – sgeureka tc 00:05, 29 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'm afraid that at that this point I'm going to have to fail the article for two main reasons: 2b) Considering there is an abundance of reliable, fact-checked material published on Stargate (I spent some time on both LexisNexis and NewsBank to verify this), I do not think we are justified in using Gateworld for news items. As we discovered with the report about why the show was cancelled, the independent media reported different reasons than did Gateworld; 3a) The "themes" section is really too weak, as it does not actually discuss the themes of the show, but rather the show's mythology. My library is getting the relevant books for this section, but I myself am going out of town for a week, so I won't be able to send you anything for a while.

talk) 23:08, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply
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