Talk:When We Were Young (Adele song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:37, 16 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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I will start on this today! --K. Peake 09:37, 16 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking this! Very excited for this one.--NØ 11:11, 16 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • Dean Street Studios → Dean Street in the infobox per the usage of studios in the parameter of the same name
  • WP:OVERLINK
    of Adele under songwriters
  • Add a comma after third studio album
  • "Adele and Tobias Jesso Jr. wrote it," → "Adele and Tobias Jesso Jr. wrote the song,"
  • Mention how the song was written as the third sentence of the lead since this is notable here
  • The release date is 22 January 2016 not 20 January
  • Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
  • ""When We Were Young" has piano instrumentation" → "it has piano instrumentation"
  • "Inspired by the imagery" → "Inspired by the vision" or something similar since imagery is not appropriate here
  • Re-word the sentence to mention the song reached the top 10 in 11 countries, including two or three notable ones
  • Add a sentence afterwards mentioning notable certifications
  • "The Ellen DeGeneres Show, and" → "The Ellen DeGeneres Show and"

Background and release

  • Img looks good!
  • "who had produced many songs" → "a producer of many songs"
  • Add the release year of 21
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on Los Angeles
  • She actually did work with Tobias Jesso Jr. so is writing expressed interest really the appropriate description?
  • "and they spent almost three days" → "and they spent about three days" per the source
  • Only "When We Were Young" is sourced as being created
  • The house location is only sourced as in Los Angeles, not Brentwood
  • "melodies and lyrics."" → "melodies and lyrics"." per
    MOS:QUOTE
  • Pipe ballads to Sentimental ballad
  • "and started a" → "and started creating a"
  • "He thought it had" → "He thought the song had"
  • Italicise The Fader
  • "he pushed her beyond" → "he pushed Adele beyond"
  • "cry to it."" → "cry to it"." per the source
  • Italicise 60 Minutes
  • "wondering what would be" → "questioning what would be"
  • Pipe digital download to Music download
  • "in some countries" → "in various countries" also, only one country is sourced
  • "Its official artwork features" → "The official artwork features"
  • "of her younger self."" → "of her younger self"."
  • "called it "adorable,"" → "called it "adorable","

Composition and lyrical interpretation

  • "sample of "When We Were Young"'s" → "sample of the song's" on the audio sample text
  • "reminisces past memories" → "reminisces about past memories"
  • "engineered the song, and plays" → "engineered the song and plays" per British English
  • "synthesizer, and percussion." → "synthesizer and percussion." with the wikilink
  • "plays the piano, and" → "plays the piano and"
  • "It incorporates bass, drums, and guitar in its instrumentation, was" → "The song incorporates bass, drums and guitar in its instrumentation, was"
  • "in London, and mixed at" → "in London and mixed at" with the pipe
  • ""When We Were Young" is a" → "Musically, "When We Were Young" is a"
  • Italicise i-D
  • "considered it "a 70s styled shimmery disco ballad."" → "considered the song "a 70s styled shimmery disco ballad"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • ""somber piano chords," which" → ""somber piano chords", which"
  • "show off her staggering, empathic voice."" → "show off [Adele's] staggering, empathic voice"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "come-to-Jesus money note."" → "come-to-Jesus money note"."
  • "Adele described it as" → "Adele described the song as"
  • "to the work of Elton John, and" → "to the work of Elton John and"
  • Not done as this makes it sound like "The Way We Were" was a duet between John and Streisand.
  • Rest of the section soon!
  • Done up to here! I've kept all the oxford commas. Unless you absolutely insist, I think combing through the article and removing them will be an unnecessary and tedious task. Regards.--NØ 15:48, 16 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • It looks good so far; I did some minor copy editing for you though.

Critical reception
  • I moved it to being the second sentence as I think that works as well.
  • "as her fifth-best," → "as Adele's fifth-best,"
  • "elaborated: "she spins" → "elaborated that "she spins"
  • Wikilink The Guardian

Commercial performance

  • Change to double platinum and mention that the certification was in the United Kingdom
  • The official title of the award here is "2× Platinum", not double platinum.
  • "It reached number 14" → "The song reached number 14"
  • Should platinum really be capitalised?
  • Yup, my explanation from the "Happier Than Ever" GAN applies here as well I suppose.
  • "and earned a 5× Platinum" → "and earned a quintuple platinum" mentioning that this was in Canada
  • Mention the charts the Australia and New Zealand positions were on as well as that the certifications were in the countries
  • "and Gold in Belgium,[70] Mexico." → "and Gold in Belgium and Mexico." moving [70] to the end of the sentence, also should gold really be capitalised?

Live performances

  • The Genting Arena performance is not mentioned in prose, so either write this out or use a different img
  • "on 24 February 2016." → "on 24 February."
  • Mention that the Glastonbury performance was part of the encore
  • The tour name Adele Live 2016 is not sourced

Covers

  • Retitle to Cover versions
  • "her powerful vocals."" → "her powerful vocals"." per MOS:QUOTE

Credits and personnel

Charts

Weekly charts

  • See
    MOS:TABLECAPTION
    for the second table

Year-end charts

Certifications

  • Good

Release history

  • None of these columns should be sortable

See also

References

  • Copyvio score looks fairly good at 35.5%!
  • Shouldn't Earone be cited as publisher instead on ref 13?
  • Pipe Plugged In to Focus on the Family on ref 19
  • Fix
    MOS:QWQ
    issues with refs 23 and 25
  • Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication) on refs 32 and 76, removing it from the title of the first ref
  • Pipe Inquirer to Philippine Daily Inquirer on ref 34
  • Pipe The Huffington Post to HuffPost on ref 35
  • Ref 75 is missing a work/website/publisher; add whichever one is appropriate
  • It seemed to point to Just Jared Jr. which has sketchy reliability so I have replaced this.

External links

  • Good

Final comments and verdict

  •  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this took just as long as I thought! --K. Peake 10:48, 17 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Everything should be addressed now, K. Peake. Thanks a lot for the review and apologies for some of those source-text integrity issues in the Background section, I should've gone over that once before the nomination. Hope you have a great week!--NØ 12:15, 17 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • MaranoFan All good, apart from why is Andy Black still mentioned in ref 83 when that source says nothing about him? --K. Peake 07:12, 18 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • ✓ Pass now, nice job on cleaning up this somewhat messy article! --K. Peake 08:13, 18 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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