User:Aoba47/sandbox

I think the following part, (Following a bidding war over the record, it was announced on November 14, 2013, that Robinson had signed a deal with Astralwerk), could be shortened to "Following a bidding war over Worlds, Robinson signed a deal with Astralwerk." I am not sure of the announcement is entirely necessary, but I will leave that up to you.
I believe these two sentences, (On February 10, 2014, Robinson released a promotional video revealing the title of the album. It features a robotic voice saying worlds on loop for ten hours.), can be combined to form something like, "On February 10, 2014, Robinson revealed the album's title in a video that featured a robotic voice repeating worlds for ten hours."
Could you expand on this sentence further: (Robinson stated that he disliked marketing campaigns that were "wishy-washy", and attempted to make all his work "feel pretty intentional".)?
I have a clarification question about this part, (Astralwerks wanted to release "Shepherdess"). Is there any further information on how he was able to convince his record label to release a completely different single? I was just curious as it seems like a big move for someone who just joined the label.
I have a question about this part, (shortly before the 86th Academy Awards). Is there any connection between the Oscars and the song? It just seems a tad random.
The words "was released" is repeated twice in this part, ("and was released elsewhere a day later" and "was released on May 21").
Could you clarify this sentence for me: (The album's visuals were illustrated by the artist David Aguado.)? I am not entirely sure what "visuals" means in this context? Music videos? Album artwork?
The "Tour" subsection seems rather short. Why not combine this into the overall "Release and promotion" section instead? That section already uses a photo from the tour anyway.
I have a question about this part, (In May 2014, Robinson announced a North American tour for Worlds, which spanned from August 28 to October 18). The citation is to the announcement that these dates will happen. Do you have a citation for when the tour was actually happening or after it wrapped to just confirm these dates happened?
This part, (what Robinson had accomplished with the album and his motivations for it, Robinson's development in the future), repeats "Robinson" in a way that reads awkwardly. I would see if there is a way to avoid that.
The "Critical reception" section has points on how the album received negative reviews, but these are not mentioned in lead.
Could you provide any further information from the sources in this sentence: (Paper's Matt Moen and Billboard's Krystal Rodriguez and Kat Bein said that Worlds was a "game changer")? How was the album a "game changer".
I would be consistent with using title case for citation titles. For instance, it is not used in Citation 60 or 71.