User:Jujuthebean/Ann Lowe/SpicyHamSamson Peer Review

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General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Jujuthebean

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jujuthebean/Ann_Lowe?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Ann Lowe

Evaluate the drafted changes

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While there isn't a significantly large portion of content you're adding, I don't think that's necessarily a bad thing. Your planned additions all seem to be for the sake of improving the article's quality, and are all neutral, up-to-date, and reliably backed up. That being said, the biggest gap I'm noticing regards her son and daughter. At the moment, the article skips directly from her early life to her already having a son who she's working with. I'm not sure if there's a lack of information in this regard, but I feel like it's at least a little important to address who the father is, and when the son was born. Additionally, her daughter Ruth is only briefly mentioned in the section regarding her death, so I feel like the same things should be addressed for her too. Aside from that, this draft seems pretty good.