User talk:Hyowonl/sandbox

Review #1

Lead Section - It might be useful to include an infobox for the language and the endangerment level. Hyperlinks could be added to some of the geographical places and language families listed (e.g. Algeria, Mali, Berber etc.).

Phonology Section - Includes bare minimum information (consonant chart, vowel chart, syllable structure). Consonant and vowel chart is clearly done. Maybe the formatting of the consonant chart could be improved (delete extra spacing, delete unused columns such as retroflex, indicate which consonants are voiced vs. voiceless). Is there any information about stress and tone of the language that can be included? All information so far looks accurate, and the table of examples for the syllable structure is very thorough and well done.

Morpology section - Overall easy to comprehend. Could add wiki hyperlinks to terms such as "ablaut", "affixation", "underived", "nominalizer", "perfective"/"imperfective", "hortative" etc. for more contextual understanding. In the noun section, could maybe include examples for female nouns marked by prefix t- and/or circumfix t-t? Similarly, examples in the Ablaut section would be useful.

Syntax section - Includes bare minimum from the practicum prep (basic word order and headedness), and is clear and concise. One thing that would further improve clarity is if the headedness examples were vertically aligned. This can be done via the "interlinear" template. It might also be useful to indicate which is the head and which is the complement (e.g. in the Adposition and Noun Phrase Complement pair, adposition is the head and noun phrase is the complement). For the second draft it would be good to include more types of head-complement pairs if they exist in the language, as well as how case and agreement works in the language.

Overall - Good first draft! All information appears in the most appropriate section, and no redundancies are apparent. Greatest strengths: sections and subsections are laid out in a logical and easy to understand manner. For the second draft, you could consider adding to the more bare sections, especially the syntax section.

Jz9 lin360 (talk) 21:10, 11 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Has all the main sections and well organized, but you could build out your page more once you have time (namely, beyond things from the practicum prep).

I would consider adding more links to other Wikipedia pages (e.g. you could link the Berber page) to help with reader understanding.

You make some strong-sounding claims throughout that I would double check (e.g. "robustly head final"). Even if your grammar does explicitly state these claims, it would be nice to have additional explanation/discussion/examples to expand on the claims.

Use the interlinear template for gloss formatting (see Piazza).

Hits the key points, but I'm wondering if maybe more background could be included. Maybe some brief history of the language, why it has two different names, any other questions/overview information your grammar may provide.

Maybe I'm missing something obvious, but I don't completely understand what being spoken majorly/minor in a place means.

Has the basic information from the practicums, but is there anything additionally interesting in your language's phonology? Your language seems to have diacritics for example, so maybe you could talk about those.

Good use of examples for syllable structure section.

The tables aren't too clear though; formatting may help (mostly the odd spacing and alignment). I'm also curious if your consonant table layout is directly from the practicum prep compared to from your grammar (the latter is what it should be I believe).

Your starting phrase is a bit strong. Is there any place in your grammar that explicitly states that many morphological processes "require a combination of the two [ablaut and affixation]"? Or is it your own interpretation? If your grammar does state that, I think it may also be interesting to include processes outside of this combination as "many" implies that there are other things. You could go less in depth with those other processes, but I think exceptions to the rule could be something interesting to talk about/include.

There are a few other strong-sounding statements throughout this section (mostly with the word "most" and variants like "usually", etc.) and I just wanted to double check that this was something stated by your grammar and not a conclusion you drew separately. You did quote "permeates" so maybe your grammar does say something along these lines (but also, I think we have to be careful with quoting; one word may be fine, but I would double check).

More examples in your ablaut section would be nice. At least right now, it seems to be a restatement of your other morphology subsections, but perhaps there are other examples of ablaut you would want to include.

"robustly" head final seems like a strong statement that I would double check.

--Jczhu (talk) 02:50, 12 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]