Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/Highlander: The Series (season 2)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs) It is obvious that you have exerted much effort into this excellent article, kudos to you and the other collaborating copy-editors!

• "MacLeod discovers Tommy had been hired by Mike to kill Gallen" I think that a "that" should be inserted before "Tommy".
• "Sullivan kills Coleman when he tries to buy George" Literally?
  • Yes. Those are tough men. Rosenknospe (talk) 21:52, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "MacLeod and Charlie meet Sara Lightfoot (Michelle Thrush) and baby Jamie who are fleeing the Hoskins family." Needs a comma after "Jamie".
• "Xavier St. Cloud uses mercenaries to behead fellow Immortals." "uses"-->employs.
• "so MacLeod fights her and beheads her. "
• "sarcophagus" Wikilink it.
• "MacLeod realizes Constantine"-->MacLeod realizes that Constantine...
• "Richie joins MacLeod in Paris because he is chased" Add being before "chased".
• The "Notes" need references. Dabomb87 (talk) 21:09, 28 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The note about Michel Modo is self-referential and in my opinion doesn't need to be sourced, and I have provided references for the two others. I have done all the modifications you suggested, too. Thank you very much for taking the time ! Rosenknospe (talk) 21:52, 29 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Truco (talk · contribs)

Lead

• It aired September 27, 1993 in broadcast syndication,[2] continuing to follow the adventures of Duncan MacLeod, a 400-year-old Immortal who can only die if he is beheaded. - how about stating The first episode of the season aired on September 27, 1993...
• The episodes are available at the online video on demand service Hulu, a joint venture between NBC and Fox Broadcasting Company. - on the not "at the"
• The lead should also state when the season ended.

Production

• The first season aired earlier in the United States than elsewhere, thus in early 1993, Rysher TPE, the distributor that had sold the series to the American market, had to make a decision about financing a new season even though several of its co-producers had yet to air the first season. - this needs to be reworded, but then I got confused at the end. The sentence, to me, is stating that after airing in the U.S., the distributor was going to make a decision whether to finance a new season to the U.S., 'yet the co-producers had yet to air the first season (the part in bold throws the sentence off, it needs rewording.

You got it right. Rysher was distributor and co-producer at the same time. They invested money and got it back in advertising rights, if you like. The thing is, in North America episodes are aired very quickly after they are filmed (about one week to two months) while in Europe they are typically aired more than a year after they are filmed. (You need time to translate the episode and dub it, then the channels usually wait until September to start a season in order to get the maximum audience.) What happened was, Rysher aired the first season between October 1992 and May 1993. In early 1993, even before the end of the season, they saw that they were getting good ratings and wanted a new season. At this time, none of the European partners (TF1, RTL, Reteitalia) had aired the series, they would only start in fall 1993, at which time the second season was already in production and the first episodes were being aired. So the Europeans wouldn't be able to make a decision. I'll try to explain that in the article, I'm not sure of what you mean by "the part in bold" though, could you please clarify ? Rosenknospe (talk) 10:45, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, done now. Rosenknospe (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

• Gaumont Television (France), Rysher TPE (United States) and Reteitalia (Italy)[7] returned for the new season. - what do you mean "returned?" Returned to produce the series?

Yes. I'll reword that. Rosenknospe (talk) 10:45, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Rosenknospe (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

• Amuse Video (Japan) also was no longer part of the co-production, but Gaumont Television Christian Charret signed Filmline International (Canada) as a new partner. - was also not "also was"
• As a result of this new co-production agreement, with less wealthy partners, the budget of the season decreased to US$22 million, half of it coming from French [8] and other European sources,[9] and the income per episode from international sales, which had reached $800,000 in the previous season, decreased too - 1)It is stated that the budget decreased to a certain amount, but what was the budget for the first season? (it helps to clarify this in the article) 2)"half of it coming from the French" - is this intended as it was the French's fault for the decrease or the budget itself? 3)I would make the "and the" into a semi colon 4)What did the income per episode decrease to?

1) I'll get you that.

2) No, it only means that half of the money came from the French and other Europeans, quite an unusual fact for a North American series. The budget decreased because the co-production agreement was redesigned, and the new partners has less money to invest than the former ones.

3) Done.

4) I don't have this information, the source only says that it decreased, but not how much income they made in the new season. Rosenknospe (talk) 10:45, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Everything fixed now. Rosenknospe (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

• According to The Hollywood Reporter, pre-production started in April 1993[11] and filming in June the same year. - comma before "and"
• Creatively, the second season was intended to be more action-oriented than the first, but lead actor Adrian Paul refused to do "another kung fu series", insisting that more romance and history be brought in the scripts. - the comma should go within the quotation marks like ","
• Former executives in charge of production Marc du Pontavice and Denis Leroy returned as associate producer and coordinating producer respectively. - comma before "Marc" and after "Leroy"
• David Abramowitz served as head writer,[17] but he could not be credited as such because as Highlander was a Canadian-based show, only Canadian writers could author scripts;[18] Abramowitz was American, and thus was credited as creative consultant instead. - remove the "as" before "Highlander" and add an and before "only"
• Brent Karl Clackson was line producer in Vancouver, succeeded by Patrick Millet (with the title of production manager) on the Paris segment. - add the before "line producer" and add but was before "succeeded"
• The opening theme is "Princes of the Universe" from the 1986 album A Kind of Magic by Queen;[6] incidental music was composed by Roger Bellon. - was not "is" (past tense)

Cast

• Jim Byrnes was introduced as MacLeod's Watcher Joe Dawson, in the season's first episode "The Watchers". - comma before "Joe"

Reception

• During the 1993 November sweeps, ratings increased from 3.5 the previous year to 4.1 (a 17 percent gain), meaning that 4.1 percent of viewers aged 18 to 49 watched the episode. - it should be elaborated earlier that the ratings were among adults, because it literally does not "mean that 4.1....etc."--Truco 21:54, 6 January 2009 (UTC)

Doing... Rosenknospe (talk) 10:45, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Reworded. Thank you very much for your thorough review. Any other thoughts ? Rosenknospe (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]