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The list was promoted by Dabomb87 22:57, 20 January 2010 [1].

List of Asian American Medal of Honor recipients

Nominator(s):
talk) 14:38, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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I am nominating this for featured list because it is a complete list, with proper references and I think it meets all the other criteria required for review.

talk) 14:38, 24 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 23:03, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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  • I think the lead could be expanded a touch. You have only two major sections to the list so writing a paragraph summarising the recipients in the lead (i.e. how many, where, why etc) shouldn't be too hard.
  • "received the Medal of Honor. José Nísperos was the first person of Asian descent to receive the Medal," - receive the medal is a little repetitive here.
Done.--
talk) 20:13, 29 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • "and he received his for " replace with "after" and then replace the next "after" with "following" perhaps? A little more succinct?
Done--
talk) 23:45, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Trinidad's date of action is 1915 but your intro to this section says fighting continued until 1913... I'm confused. The heading mentions peacetime but the lead to this table doesn't make it clear.
Done I think this is clearer now too.--
talk) 01:42, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Not sure you need to link conflict to war.
Not sure what you mean here, could you clarify?--
talk) 22:54, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • World War II is overlinked.
Done. --
talk) 23:02, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • Worth mentioning that only two officers were awarded this in WWII?
Done--
talk) 22:25, 1 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Unit doesn't sort correctly - I'd expect 7th before 100th for instance. I'd look at the {{
    SortKey
    }} template.
Done, Took me a little while to figure this out but I think its fixed now. --
talk) 14:28, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Not 100% on my alt text but should they all reflect that the people in the images are Asian American?
Done- I removed the reference to asian from the ones that contained it. Given the context of the article it is not necesary and the article title emphasizes that they are of asian decent. --
talk) 22:57, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Sortable table - link each link every time. Check platoon. There could be others.
Could you clarify this a little too, im confused. --
talk) 22:57, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • Don't think you need to link United States in the Korean war section.
Done--
talk) 22:54, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • "armistice (ceasefire agreement) " - you've linked armistice so no need for the parenthetical hint.
Done--
talk) 22:54, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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  • Don't mix date formats in the references. Either all ISO or all human-readable.
Done--
talk) 17:05, 28 December 2009 (UTC)[reply
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The Rambling Man (talk) 16:57, 27 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • Just make sure that every time you link something in your sortable tables, you link it every single time because it's a sortable list. E.g. platoon. The Rambling Man (talk) 23:03, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks..--
talk) 23:09, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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Still says "During this conflict two Asian Americans... " - but wasn't one of them peacetime? The Rambling Man (talk) 23:49, 2 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Your absolutely right. Ill get that fixed in the next couple hours. --
talk) 00:14, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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I think it should be ok now. --
talk) 00:52, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Support: Just a few minor technical points:
    • emdashes (for example in Korean War section) should be unspaced according to
      WP:DASH
      ;
Done--
talk) 04:51, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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Sorry, I don't believe this one has been covered off on yet. There are still spaces between the emdashes in the Korean War section. To fix it, you need to remove the non breaking space mark up code. — AustralianRupert (talk) 07:19, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Know I think I have it.--
talk) 16:16, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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    • in the lead, there is irregular capitalisation of the word "As" (as in as of);
Done This was due to the use of the as of template but I removed it. --
talk) 04:51, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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    • in the lead, as you mention the first recipient, would it make sense to mention the last recipient?
Done- I expanded the lead a little and added this to it. --
talk) 16:55, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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    • there is some inconsistency in style regarding US and U.S.;
"is there a preference to which is used? --
talk) 04:51, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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From what I can tell, if using American English (which this article does) U.S. would be preferred, but I don't think it is required. I normally use "US" myself, but I don't think it matters so long as there is consistency.
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (abbreviations) might be able to help. AustralianRupert (talk) 06:12, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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Done --
talk) 16:20, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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    • there is some inconsistency in how you deal with numbers greater than 10. In the lead you use numbers (e.g. "31 have been awarded", but elsewhere you use letters (e.g. in World War II "twenty-four Asian American awardees, twenty-one...".
Is there a preference to how these should be handled. I believe I read something were numbers less than ten were spelled out but numbers larger than ten were displayed as numbers. I can't seem to find that at the moment though. --
talk) 04:51, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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I believe that you are correct.
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates and numbers)#Numbers as figures or words states that the general rule is to spell numbers below ten, and use numbers for 10 and above. — AustralianRupert (talk) 06:12, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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Done- I think I fixed these. --
talk) 16:31, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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Otherwise, I think it should be okay. Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 04:26, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

All my concerns have been dealt with, so I have changed my comments to support. Well done. Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 21:39, 3 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments. Support. Well written, I have a few things. Arsonal (talk) 22:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Add a comma after "September 17, 2009" as the numbers 2009 and 31 next to each other would look slightly awkward if the inline citation were not there.
  • Done. --
    talk) 23:22, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • It might be advisable to wikilink the first instance of "Asian American" so as to provide context of the term's scope.
  • It seems that some of the other Medal of Honor lists contain a column for "Place of Action". I would like to see the information on this list as well.
  • The World War II section mentions: "Of the Asian American recipients during World War II, only two were officers." Forgive me for not being knowledgeable, but at what rank does a military personnel become an officer? This might need to be clarified.
  • I clarified it some more but please let me know if you want me to change anything else. --
    talk) 18:39, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
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  • Is ref 22 needed? It seems like additional information and doesn't connect well with the main prose. Arsonal (talk) 19:38, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Well written, although I did notice a disambig link when I ran the dab checker, can you locate that and remove it if at all possible? TomStar81 (Talk) 12:13, 13 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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