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List of Mir spacewalks

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talk) 12:50, 26 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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I would like to put this list forward for consideration as a Featured List because I believe it cover the topic accurately & fully and meets the Featured List Criteria. I also believe I have dealt with all points raised in the

talk) 12:50, 26 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Comment An interesting list on an area I know very little about..

Thanks very much for the review, glad you find it interesting! :-) In response to your questions, I emboldened EVAs after it was suggested in the peer review that 'List of Mir spacewalks' wasn't a good opening line, and I wanted to highlight the fact that the list concerns them; I've no major objections if you think it needn't be. I've split the 1987/1988 table up, but I think the table widths are due to the shorter lengths of the summaries in those tables; if you know of a way to force them to all display as the same width, I'd be very grateful. As for the ISBNs, I've simply entered them as I found them in the publications in question; again, if they need to be put in a standard format or something, I've no objections.
talk) 21:20, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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What colour codes would you recommend?
talk) 17:06, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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For † and * color the background of the "Mission" column. Also, I am not sure that splitting every year is ideal since it leaves the likes of EO-24 split over two tables. Can't you merge them?
Nergaal (talk) 16:29, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Just completed the merge. I meant what hex codes would you suggest I use?
talk) 18:06, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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It's been suggested below that the fewer colours involved in the table, the more
talk) 14:07, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 18:47, 7 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comments I have to say it's really good to see some niche lists here, welcome!
  • Avoid bold links, no need here to link either Mir or Spacewalks (even though that's now no longer linked!).
  • Lead image doesn't need a period.
  • "With a greater mass than ..." would prefer that as "mass greater than..."
  • "third generation of space stations" what were the first and second generations? (speaking strictly as a non-expert here)
  • Second lead sentence is too long, split after "modular design".
  • Don't intersperse "small" coding in the lead, leave the years in full size.
  • " completing 15.7 orbits per day." a long-shot but perhaps consider saying each of those are "earth" orbits?
  • Yuri Romanenko is Yury per our article.
  • "The longest EVA was performed on 17 July 1990, when EO-6 crewmembers Anatoly Solovyev and Aleksandr Balandin conducted an EVA ..." poor and repetitive, don't repeat EVA here. Given the list name, suggest you replace one of the EVA with spacewalk.
  • Why is the list split into multiple sections by year? Why not just add a horizontal navbox at the top which is anchored to various entries of a single merged list?
  • Have you checked that these tables meet
    WP:ACCESS? I would always recommend a pass by User:RexxS
    who is abundantly generous with his time in this situations.
  • Perhaps "duration" needs explanation because it doesn't add up for EO-3 EVA 1, EO-3 EVA 2 for example.
  • What's the blue line between 6 and 7?
  • Why doesn't every EVA have an EVA designation?
  • Lots and lots of redlinked EOs, can you do something about this?
  • Not relevant if you merge the lists (which would be good) but if you insist on keeping them split, then can you make the col widths the same from section to section.
  • Odd gallery towards the end... needs context.
  • Refs 1, 2, 6 and 8 are really "general references" and, as such, would do better without being continually re-used.
  • Ref 3 needs an en-dash.
  • Ref 11 has a spare period (you need to "cheat" the template)

The Rambling Man (talk) 18:28, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, thanks very much for the review! The merged-list-with-navbox sounds like a great idea, how do I go about coding that?
talk) 21:09, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Similar to this list, I knocked up a sandbox for boxing champs, here. It sort of does what I'm suggesting here. Let me know if there's anything that needs explaining. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:19, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Grand, thanks - I'll have a go at coding that in tomorrow. In other news, I think I've dealt with most of your other comments, with exceptions that I've noted above.
talk) 21:25, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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How's that looking? :-)
talk) 18:06, 29 March 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Comment: Apologies for taking so long to look at your list, but I hope I can be helpful. Improving the accessibility of an article isn't an "all-or-nothing = pass/fail" process, so I hope you'll understand that my comments are mainly suggestions, not requirements for my support (apart from a couple of things like column headers and alternate text).

If you'd like to try out any or all of these suggested changes (you really need to do the column headers), but are unsure, I'm happy to help – either in doing some for you, or in helping if you get into difficulties while trying them out. I know the reviewers here won't complain if the list gets a few edits as a result; improving accessibility doesn't reduce the stability of an article! Hope that helps, --RexxS (talk) 19:25, 1 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking a look at this, and thank for your kind words on my alt text! I think I've sorted out the dagger signs, and the issue with the principal expeditions was because some of them disappeared. I've restored these, and clarified the description on the
talk) 16:48, 5 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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The daggers are good, thank you.
I can see now that each EO-X was a different principal mission, and so the separators are redundant. That means that a screen reader won't miss out on the information that is provided only by colour.
The markup on the column headers is good - don't forget that they become bold and centred by default when they become headers.
Why should the first row have a blue background? (It's the #CCCCFF that produces it.)
I can't find the diff where you set the rows, so I can't tell how the table displays weirdly. Could you be a bit more specific about the problem you had? --RexxS (talk) 20:19, 5 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
This happens:
# Mission Spacewalkers Start (UTC) End (UTC) Duration
rowspan=2 |1 EO-2
EVA 1
†
Yury Romanenko
Aleksandr Laveykin
 11 April 1987
19:41 		11 April 1987
23:21 		3 hours, 40 minutes
Inspected the rear port of the core module following the failure of Kvant-1 to achieve a successful hard docking on 9 April and discovered a piece of debris left behind following the departure of Progress 28 on 27 March. This was removed, and the subsequent hard docking of the new module was observed.[1][2][3]
Distressingly, I can't seem to find a place to put it in the code which doesn't result in something similar?
talk) 14:07, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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# Mission Spacewalkers Start (UTC) End (UTC) Duration
1 EO-2
EVA 1
†
Yury Romanenko
Aleksandr Laveykin
 11 April 1987
19:41 		11 April 1987
23:21 		3 hours, 40 minutes
Inspected the rear port of the core module following the failure of Kvant-1 to achieve a successful hard docking on 9 April and discovered a piece of debris left behind following the departure of Progress 28 on 27 March. This was removed, and the subsequent hard docking of the new module was observed.[1][2][3]
Rowspan and scope are both attributes of the tag, so there's no '|' between them. --RexxS (talk) 22:35, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
How's that looking? I must say, this FLC is turning out to be great - friendly help and advice from everyone and a tutorial on properly coding tables! The FAC people could learn a lot from you folks!
talk) 17:08, 14 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Support. It looks good to me. All of the accessibility issues are resolved as far as I can tell. --RexxS (talk) 17:34, 19 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Many thanks! :-)
talk) 17:36, 19 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Well,
talk) 14:07, 12 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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I would say remove it. If there's any doubt, and the table is fully backed by other sources anyway, that seems to me to be the best thing to do. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 15:14, 14 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'd like to argue for keeping it, partly because I personally believe in its reliability, and partly because the other sources are books which will be unavailable to the vast majority of readers - having this website available allows them to check things.
talk) 17:36, 19 April 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Comments:

  • In intro: is "non-monolithic" the same as "modular design"?
Yes, but I can't think of a better way to word it.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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How about just removing the last part of the sentence ("with a modular design.") since it is already implied by "non-monolithic"? bamse (talk) 10:23, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • What is a 3rd generation space station (or what are 1st/2nd gen.)?
1st & 2nd were monolithic, 3rd non-monolithic. The
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Would be good to have a wikilink or footnote or make it more clear in prose that 3rd gen. implies non-monolithic. bamse (talk) 10:23, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've sorted this out, let me know what you think.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Better but the sentence: With a mass greater than that of any previous space station, Mir was the first of the modular space stations, constructed from 1986 to 1996., makes me wonder: what other modular space stations were there? And what does the phrase "constructed from 1986 to 1996" refer to, to Mir or to "modular space stations"? bamse (talk) 19:20, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, done.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • Was "technologies required for the permanent occupation of space" the only research interest on Mir?
No, they also researched biology, human biology, physics, astronomy, meteorology, as it says prior to the comment on spacecraft systems. The primary aim of the entire programme was the technology development.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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The sentence says: "...experiments in biology [etc] in order to [develop space technology]". I read this to mean that the research (in biology, physics, ...) was aimed at space technology and not at general technology development. bamse (talk) 19:20, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is the boldfacing of "Mir" and "Spacewalks" (separated by a paragraph) according to the MOS? I don't think boldfacing of the title (or parts of title) is required or even desired in featured lists.
Done.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • I don't understand the "but" in the sentence "The longest EVA was performed on 17 July 1990, when EO-6 crewmembers Anatoly Solovyev and Aleksandr Balandin left the station to repair their spacecraft, Soyuz TM-9, but encountered difficulties shutting the airlock hatch upon their return."
Replaced with 'then'.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • Not sure the sentence "EVAs conducted during different principal expeditions are indicated by a wide blue separator." is clear (but I am not a native reader/speaker). Possibly something like "EVAs conducted by different principal expeditions are separated by a ..." would be more clear.
Done.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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How about: "indicated by a wide blue separator"->"separated by a wide blue line"? bamse (talk) 10:24, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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I also changed "indicated"->"separated" which is more to the point in my opinion. bamse (talk) 19:20, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Can "hard docking" be wikilinked or explained (in footnote or text) or is it obvious?
I can't find an appropriate article to link to, but I think its fairly obvious.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Does it mean permanent docking, or something else? bamse (talk) 19:20, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is the legend repeated after the table?
Removed.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • Why are there always two spacewalkers? Were they walking at the same time? Were they exiting/entering together? Can this be discussed in the intro?
  • References 1 and 2 seem to reference almost all spacewalks and should probably be made into general references.
You mean just put them as bullets in the references section?
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Yes, and put them in a subsection "General" or something like it. I've also seen often used references mentioned in prose in the lead, which could be an alternative. Anyway, this is just a suggestion, so feel free to do whatever you think is best. bamse (talk) 19:20, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • References 1 and 8 need accessdates.
Done.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • In which way is ref 5 used?
The '15.7 orbits per day'.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Based on which input values for (Semimajor axis, Mass of sun, Mass of planet)? bamse (talk) 19:21, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is ref 6 part of ref 3 and is ref 7 part of ref 4?
Yes.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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So 3 and 4 cite whole books while 6 and 7 only part of those books? Would be good to have page numbers for 3 and 4 as well (unless you really mean to cite the whole books). bamse (talk) 10:23, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Book references should have page numbers IMHO.
  • What do "EO" and "STS" in the mission names stand for?
экспедиция основная (mission primary) and Space Transportation System.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Could it be explained somewhere (lead, legend,...)? bamse (talk) 10:23, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I put it in the legend.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  • Are the images at the bottom, the only images we have of Mir spacewalks?
Yep.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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OK, just wondered whether we could have images for every table entry, i.e. inside the table. Since there are so few, that does not make much sense. I think image galleries are somewhat discouraged in featured content, but here it looks good and adds nicely to the table in my opinion. bamse (talk) 10:23, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

bamse (talk) 19:25, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Replied to some, working on others.
talk) 10:08, 3 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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Further improvements.
talk) 11:04, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply
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  1. ^ a b Wade, Mark (17 October 2010). "Mir". Encyclopedia Astronautica.
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    ISBN 0950659746
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