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2009 World Series
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Peer review #2 on this article, #1 is available here. Wizardman has been talking about finally getting this to FA quality, and I tend to agree. Twice tried in 2010 but it never quite set aflame during FAC. I believe I've dealt with every issue suggested, would love any further insight you have! Thanks, Staxringold talkcontribs 18:56, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- Side question: What would people think about using this Flickr image or some cropped version of it in the section on Paterson? Staxringold talkcontribs 00:37, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
Quick review Contridictions: doesn't, didn't, should be does not, did not unless they are in quotes
Americanisation v British spellings e.g. Honor v Honour, don't know what you've got written but it should either be British or American spellings and not both in the aritcle.
Note the above 2 are of the automated tips and I've done this quickly so I can't double check. But lately there seems to be a bug with it where it doesn't pay much attension to the article. E.g. It says that this article fails for it's lead, when it does not. So there maybe some work there, there may not be some work.
- Yeah, I don't see any honour/colour/etc mixups, a clearly American event so uses American-style English. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:06, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
Feel that the final paragraph in the lead could be refined or split with a fourth paragraph detailing the records. Think a bit too much priviledge on what happened in the game. (just my view point.)
- Done. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:06, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
You have 2 DEAD links you need to look at as I recall in FA rules that the article must not have a dead link in it I think.
USA today and Glee are in italics but ESPN and all the broadcasters in Broacasting sections are not. Should this be consistant either all publishers and broadcasters in Italics or not at all?
- As I understand it print media and TV shows/movies are italicized, but I've never really seen things like ESPN, FOX, etc italicized. Easy to change if I'm wrong. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:06, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
Commissioner Bud Selig explored options to include a game during daylight instead of the evening, which had been rumored to be October 31 due to the Halloween holiday. He eventually opted to move the start times of the games before 8 p.m. ET for the first time in 30 years, and also rejected suggestions to play the games at neutral sites.[51][52] The Philadelphia Eagles and New York Giants played across the street from Citizens Bank Park at Lincoln Financial Field on the day of Game 4. The National Football League moved that game's kickoff time to 1 p.m. to avoid it ending too close to the start of Game 4.[53] Similarly, Game 5 was played at Citizens Bank Park on the same day as the Philadelphia Flyers hosted the Tampa Bay Lightning at the Wachovia Center. The opening faceoff of the hockey game was scheduled for 7 p.m. but the National Hockey League moved it to 5 p.m. to avoid conflict.[54] Feel that this paragraph needs to be the second para in that section with this paragraph moving to the last para in this section
The Phillies won the previous season's World Series against the Tampa Bay Rays for the franchise's second championship. The Yankees lost their previous World Series appearance to the Florida Marlins in 2003 and had not won since 2000 against the New York Mets. This was the fifth Series played between teams from New York and Philadelphia, and was the first Yankees–Phillies matchup since 1950.[1] The series was also the fourth consecutive time that the Phillies faced a team from the AL East in the World Series, and the Yankees had faced an NL East opponent in three of their four most recent World Series appearances.[45] This World Series has been nicknamed the "Turnpike Series", for the New Jersey Turnpike, which connects New York to Philadelphia through the state of New Jersey.[24] Major League Baseball nicknamed it the "Liberty Series", based on the Liberty Bell in Philadelphia and the Statue of Liberty in New York.[46]
- Sorry, I don't quite get what you're asking. Could you describe it with just the lead-in words of the para rather than these giant blocks of text, not really sure what order you're looking for. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:06, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
- I'll make the change of what I was trying to convay feel free to revert if you disagree. KnowIG (talk) 10:46, 3 February 2011 (UTC)
Joe West, Dana DeMuth, Gerry Davis, Brian Gorman, Jeff Nelson, and Mike Everitt served as umpires for the series. The umpires for the series were...
That's my thoughts on what is a totally wow article. KnowIG (talk) 23:11, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
Lee's pitching performance made history in several ways. Change to Following Lee's pitching perfomance he achieved the following feats:
- Thanks for this, I'll get right on these changes. That last note seems very awkward though, those feats didn't follow his performance, they were his performance. Staxringold talkcontribs 23:27, 1 February 2011 (UTC)
- Also, just checked the link-checker, I only see 1 dead link (the ABC News link on Game 4), but I'm replacing that with a TV By the Numbers link. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:12, 2 February 2011 (UTC)