Wikipedia:Peer review/Velfarre/archive1

Velfarre

I have been trying to improve this article past stub-class quality, and would like some advice on howto continue. What would you want to know when viewing an article about a club? What would you not want to know? What images would you like to see when viewing this page, or a page about another club/disco? I know that this article isn't able to achieve featured article status, however I would like to give an accurate and complete description of velfarre. Also, please critque and comment on the writing style. I have tried to stay concise and informative. Thanks for reading and your time! -- Nictius 14:05, 7 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

The timeline seems difficult to read and unecyclopedic to me. I suggest writing summarized paragraphs that cover the main events only. Sparkzilla 23:24, 10 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]