Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2010 October 2

Is this person notable enough to publish?

LloydTaylor1 (talk) 05:52, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Please read

original research, so you might read: Wikipedia:No original research. Since this person would not qualify as notable enough to have an article about him, what you might do is create a history section in the Hawkins County, Tennessee article. All statements made about a person have to be verifiable. -Uyvsdi (talk) 18:12, 2 October 2010 (UTC)Uyvsdi[reply

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Looking for feedback and a review. Thanks!

Todd827 (talk) 07:19, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article's brief but nicely done :) It doesn't even sound like an advertisement like many company articles similar to yours do, which is excellent, so I can't even suggest that needs to be improved! You might want to consider expanding the article or maybe adding more references, but really I think it's fine.

montecarlo - alt 18:39, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply

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• Remember, we need significant coverage from reliable sources which are independent of the subject. The main problem with this article, I think, is the sources. Nothing written by the subject or paid-for by the subject is independent. We should try not use a website about a group the subject founded (like here), or a book that the subject wrote (like here). Let's see if we can find stronger, more reliable sources that are more neutral, okay? :) We need these to prove the subject's notability better.
• The style and tone needs to be more
  our manual of style for more specific details. I've tried to cut down the introduction to make it shorter (longer doesn't mean better - we need quality, not quantity) and a bit more neutral here
  . I hope this will give you some good ideas how to make it sound more neutral.

I hope these comments will be of use to you. :) Cordially, → Clementina [ Scribble ] 07:00, 3 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

An overview of the Miss Spider apps for iPad, iPhone, and iPod Touch

New page for review

Jboud (talk) 17:10, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Apps in Series" is unreferenced.

"Modes of Play" goes into too much detail, and is mostly unreferenced; see

reliable sources

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"Reception" contains a couple of external links; they should not be in the body-text (and should probably just be removed) - see

WP:EL

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The three "Link to purchase" are inappropriate, spam. See

WP:EL.  Chzz  ►  20:14, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply

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71.238.45.181 (talk) 19:07, 2 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like you figured out named references for yourself.

However, I've no idea what http://152.111.1.88/ is, and I don't think it is a

reliable source. Same for blogs, downloads, and so on. You need references to better sources, such as published newspapers; something with a 'reputation for fact-checking and accuracy'.  Chzz  ►  20:17, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply

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User:Sungila/Enter_your_new_article_name_here

Cheers,

Sungila (talk) 00:19, 3 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure why the thumbnails are broken, so I've reported it in Wikipedia:Village pump (technical)#Thumbnails incorrect.

Otherwise...the article relies far too much on IMDB, discogs, and listings in sites selling the things; those are not appropriate independent, reliable sources. (Well, there is considerable debate over IMDB, but it certainly shouldn't be relied on for 'profile' type information).

There are also problems with

neutrality, and there are unreferenced claims, e.g. Campanile's work is noted for its intense realism and the sincerity of his surrealistic exploration.^{[according to whom?]} His works have been shown in both solo and group exhibitions around the world,^{[citation needed]} most recently as one of the 85 artists chosen for the multi-media art exhibition entitled, The Missing Peace: Artists Consider the Dalai Lama.^{[citation needed}

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 Chzz  ►  20:27, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hello-- This is my first article. Short and heavily footnoted. I wanted to make sure I had followed all of your guidelines well.

Also, I had originated the article in my Userpage, then had to change the title when I finally found out that the name in the Articles of Incorporation is, indeed, The Poetry Forum, Inc., instead of Poetry Forum. I accidentally saved the new titled article under the "live" spot. So I need to delete my old article.

Finally, I have a second article in my Userspace that I'm still working on and which I'll send to you shortly on Rhino Poetry.

Thanks and best regards, Ann aka Tuttitalia

Tuttitalia (talk) 02:39, 3 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

External links are better formatted as, for example, [http://www.google.com This is Google] which appears as: This is Google. I fixed the two in this article.

See

WP:CHEATSHEET

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I added it to a couple of categories.

I removed the 'unreviewed' tag.

It would be helpful if you could add more details to the references. For example, "The writer" - I do not know what this is. I guess it is a magazine or something...could you add the publisher and their location, and preferably the ISSN if there is one, so that people can locate it to check the facts.  Chzz  ►  20:34, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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notability criteria for organizations. The article needs to satisfy at least one of them. Without sources showing that The Poetry Forum, Inc. has received significant reliable independent coverage, it is at risk of deletion. Karenjc 20:42, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply

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