Talk:Beautiful Eyes/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer:

Oppose - Not a bad article so far, but needs great expansion before Good article quality. Perhaps a more could be found on promotion? It's hard to expand the chart performance section because the album was only released in the United States. A music or composition/structure section could not be expanded since the majority of the songs come from her debut album. Candyo32 (talk) 21:04, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
She only performed the song twice and there is no more information on promotion, her reasons why being explained. And I tried doing a music / composition section but it seems a bit off-topic since those songs indeed belong to her debut album. -- ipodnano05 * leave@message 21:27, 11 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • Note - Candyo32 says he is not reviewing the article[1] but only wanted to comment. Therefore, this article is still open for review by another reviewer. —mattisse (Talk) 15:34, 15 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Second GA Review

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Reviewer: –

Chase (talk) 00:48, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
]

Since there seems to have been some confusion with the original reviewer over how a GA review is done, I will be glad to review this instead.

Quick-fail criteria

  1. The article completely lacks reliable sources – see Wikipedia:Verifiability.
  2. The topic is treated in an obviously non-neutral way – see Wikipedia:Neutral point of view.
  3. There are cleanup banners that are obviously still valid, including {{cleanup}}, {{wikify}}, {{NPOV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{fact}}, {{clarifyme}}, or similar tags.
  4. The article is or has been the subject of ongoing or recent, unresolved edit wars.
  5. The article specifically concerns a rapidly unfolding current event with a definite endpoint.

This article doesn't meet any of the quick-fail criteria, so I will now assess this article by the

good article criteria
.

Good article criteria

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for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    • DONE Beautiful Eyes was commercial success; it peaked at number on the United States chart the Billboard 200. – add an "a" between "was" and "commercial," specify what position the album charted at, and rephrase the last part of the sentence to "it peaked at number nine on the U.S. Billboard 200."
    • DONE and began working on a sophomore studio album, what would become Fearless (2008), in 2007. – change this to "and began working on her second studio album, Fearless (2008), in 2007." The change from "sophomore" to "second" is due to
      MOS:MUSIC#Popular music
      , which states, "Avoid referring to an artist's second album or single as 'sophomore', as this term is not widely understood outside North America. Just use the word 'second'."
    • DONE Beautiful Eyes is musically oriented to country pop and contemporary music. – contemporary music can be dropped as well as from the infobox; pretty much any music these days is considered contemporary.
    • DONE Beautiful Eyes as a CD was only available at Wal-Mart stores in the United States and online, at Walmart.com; The digital version is currently available at MP3.walmart.com, only. – change this to "Beautiful Eyes was only made available through American Wal-Mart stores and Wal-Mart's website," the way it currently is sounds too promotional.
    • DONE In the third paragraph of the Background section, "Beautiful Eyes" is used far too much. Switch some instances to "it," "the album," etc.
    • DONE knocking her own album Taylor Swift from the top position – in this context, "knocking" isn't encyclopedic. Switch this to "replacing her own album Taylor Swift as the chart's number one album." After this part of the sentence, remove the semicolon and make the second half a new sentence; with the semicolon the sentence is far too long.
    • DONE Swift promoted Beautiful Eyes minimally for the reason being she did not want for misconceptions of the EP being her sophomore album – replace "for the reason being" with "because."
    • DONE The duplicate tracklist can be removed.
    • DONE Remove the digital one and make mention of the digital version in the section.
    • DONE Beautiful Eyes was a commercial success; it peaked at number nine on the U.S. Billboard 200. Beautiful Eyes topped Billboard Top Country Albums by succeeding Taylor Swift. The EP was not heavily promoted, though, Swift has performed the title track at different venues. Change this to "Beautiful Eyes peaked at number nine on the U.S. Billboard 200 and atop Billboard's Top Country Albums chart, succeeding her self-titled debut album. The EP was not heavily promoted, though Swift performed the title track at various venues." Peaking at number nine in one country isn't very much of a commercial success, which is why I did not include this in the rephrased paragraph.
    • DONE The second prose bullet above wasn't addressed, rephrase the sentence to "and began working on her second studio album, Fearless (2008), in 2007." In the same sentence, the comma at the end of this sentence "the release of her self-titled debut album," is not necessary, remove it.
    • DONE "I'm Only Me When I'm with You", in the background and tracklist sections, "when" is a preposition under five letters, so it does not need to be capitalized. –
      Chase (talk) 02:52, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
      ]
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to
    reliable sources): c (OR
    ):
    DONE In several references, online media such as Allmusic and Walmart.com should not be italicized.
    DONE Still needs to be addressed in the following refs: 1, 7, 8, and 11. These are not print media so they do not need to be italicized. –
    Chase (talk) 02:52, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    The Promotion section goes into unnecessary detail. What the artist wore while performing songs from the album is of little to no importance.
    Addressed. –
    Chase (talk) 02:52, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
  4. It follows the
    neutral point of view
    policy    .
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have
    suitable captions
    )    :
    WP:NFCC#3b
    . Reduce it to 200x200px to have it as small as possible for identification in the infobox.
    Still needs to be addressed. By the way, anything under 300x300 should do, 200x200 is just a preference of mine. –
    Chase (talk) 02:52, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
    Still needs to be addressed. Fix this and I will pass this GAN. –
    Chase (talk) 20:58, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    I'm putting this on hold for one week so that improvements can be made to the article. If my comments are not addressed by then, I will fail this article's GAN. –
    Chase (talk) 00:48, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
    All comments addressed, passing this GAN. –
    Chase (talk) 14:24, 29 January 2010 (UTC)[reply
    ]
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