Talk:Breaking the Fourth Wall (WandaVision)/GA1

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• "due to the fact that" → "because" (less wordy)
• Remove the comma after "Nexus of All Realities connection".
• "Cumberbatch was removed from the series entirely" – was there a reason?
• "lifted up" – both words mean the same thing so consider removing "up".
• Lola VFX
  is linked twice in #Visual_effects.
• Entertainment Weekly is also linked twice in the article.
• Is the tracklisting necessary? The only notable song is already mentioned in prose.
• "resembles modern day" → "resembles the modern day"
• "a 87% approval rating" → "an 87% approval rating"
• Again, avoid having too many quotes and add more reviews (
  WP:RECEPTION
  ).
• "affects" – typo for "effects"?
• "final two episode" → "final two episodes"
• Remove the hyphen between "theme-song".
• Remove the comma after "Bowen herself praised the episode".
• Ping when done.
  talk) 03:51, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply
  ]
  • I have addressed all the small issues. I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section but I will take a look at it soon. We should definitely have the tracklisting, like the other episode articles the music section here is a doubling as an album section because there is no way we should have a separate article for this album. - adamstom97 (talk) 04:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    • I agree regarding the track listing existing here because there is more music to the episode beside "Agatha All Along". We touch on a few points necessary for a reader here regarding Agatha All Along, while also discussing the other theme and info from Beck. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 17:59, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

• I don't think there is as much need for expanding the reception section. The second, third, and fourth paragraphs include only two reviews each. There are twenty-three on Rotten Tomatoes. The issue is that there is an overabundance of quotes instead of more reviews.
  talk) 02:17, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply
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• @
  Some Dude From North Carolina: I have made some reception updates now. I still think we had good coverage of the critical opinions on the episode, but I have added a little bit extra. Mostly just rewriting the existing reviews to try address your concerns. - adamstom97 (talk) 01:23, 12 September 2021 (UTC)[reply
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