Talk:Christmas Time (Is Here Again)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 16:15, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
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My review of this article should start tonight, thought it might take a few days due to working at Maccys. --K. Peake 16:15, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
- The length of the 1995 version is not written out anywhere in the body
- Changed it to 2:19 as this is the time that Winn (2009) uses.
- Genre should be named as Christmas but pipe to the same Wiki, plus write out and source the genre in background and comp since sources shouldn't be in the infobox
- Done.
- Separate the songwriters using bullet points instead
- Done.
- Pipe Christmas song to Christmas music
- Done.
- "by the English rock band" → "by English rock band" with the pipe
- Done.
- Shouldn't you mention it being recorded for their fifth Christmas record then write the title and add release year in brackets? Also, remove wikilink on Christmas record.
- Done and done.
- "of the group," → "of the band,"
- Done.
- "sung by the Beatles," → "sung by them,"
- Done.
- Are you sure the producer and actor introductions are needed here when they are used in the body?
- You're right, it's not necessary. Removed.
- It is not sourced that the refrain is the title of the song
- It is sourced in the text below the music sample.
- Oh sorry, must have missed that initially. --K. Peake 09:06, 31 May 2021 (UTC)
- "the song remained officially" → ""Christmas Time (Is Here Again)" remained officially"
- Done.
- "the Beatles' Sessions album." → "the Beatles' then-upcoming album Sessions." to specify
- Done.
- Mention the 1995 version being released by Apple Records, plus the shortened length should be written out in the body
- Done.
- "was re-issued in" → "was re-issuedon" with the wikilink
- Done.
- "of the original" → "of the band's original" for proper context
- Done.
Background and composition
- Remove introduction to who the Beatles are, as that being in the lead is enough
- Done.
- "distributed in December" → "which were distributed in December"
- Done.
- The change of tense in the second sentence reads awkwardly; shouldn't it be something like "later years incorporate skits and music" because the records still exist?
- Yeah, agreed. Fixed.
- Shouldn't you mention the title of the record in the following sentence because even RS writes it out?
- Done.
- "a fictional group, "The Ravellers"," → "a fictional group named the Ravellers" per MOS:THEMUSICand speech marks not being needed
- Done.
- Wikilink BBC to itself
- Done.
- Are you sure semi-colons should be used for the skits when this is not really presented in a list format?
- Whoops, I forgot to change them to commas after rewriting that sentence. Fixed.
- "and "The Ravellers" playing piano" → "and the group playing piano"
- Done.
- [5] should solely be at the end of the sentence especially since it is the only ref after the third comma
- Done.
- "calls it a" → "calls the work a"
- Done.
- Pipe nonsensical poem to Literary nonsense
- Done.
- Shouldn't the audio sample be at the start of the second para here instead?
- Yeah, that's fair. Moved it.
- "is one of the few credited to all four Beatles," → "is one of the Beatles' few releases credited to all four of them," to specify
- I rephrased it as "is one of the Beatles' few releases credited to all four members,"
- That is fine. --K. Peake 09:03, 1 June 2021 (UTC)
- Pipe key to Key (music)
- Done.
Recording
- "recorded their fifth Christmas record on" → "recorded Christmas Time Is Here Again! on"
- Done.
- "George Martin produced the session," → "Martin produced the session,"
- Done.
- Remove the comma after new EP plus mention it "was the band's first..." if this is what you mean
- Done.
- Merge the first and second paras
- Done.
- "a stage adaptation of Lennon's" → "a stage adaptation of the band member's" plus mention the book's title and add the release year in brackets
- In writing the page for In His Own Write I realized it was actually both of Lennon's books, so I've added that info and fixed it per your suggestion.
- "the Christmas record's recording, performing in the skits and singing" → "the record's recording; he performed in the skits and sung"
- Done.
- Wikilink acoustic guitar
- Done.
- "The band, along with" → "The Beatles, along with"
- Done.
- "the next day to mix the previous night's recordings." → "the day after the session to mix its recordings." since this is a new para, with the pipe
- Done.
- "of the Christmas record, with" → "of the record, with"
- Done.
- [4] should be solely at the end of the para, as it is the only ref
- Done.
Release history
- Retitle to Release
- Done.
- "with American fans instead" → "with Americans instead" to be less repetitive
- Done.
- Merge the first para with the second one
- Done.
- "This mix was originally" → "The mix was originally"
- Done.
- "to executives at EMI but" → "to executives at EMI Records but" because otherwise it sounds like you are talking about the studio again
- Done.
- Pipe CD to Compact disc
- Done.
- Pipe cross-fading to MOS:LINK2SECT
- Done.
- Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
- Done.
- "these versions of" → "the two versions of"
- Done.
- "CD single,[18] released in the UK" → "CD single in the UK" to avoid repetition of "released", plus move [18] to solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
- Done.
- "Winn writes that it is" → "Winn says it is"
- Done.
- "in a limited-edition box set," → "on limited-edition box set"
- Made it "on a limited-edition box set"
- Nice grammar fix there. --K. Peake 07:52, 2 June 2021 (UTC)
Personnel
- Shouldn't this be titled Credits and personnel?
- I don't think so. personnel.
- I don't think so.
References
Notes
- Why is Ringo Starr the only member with his article directed to here?
- I linked to him b/c he's credited under his birth name, Richard Starkey, which I wouldn't expect the average reader to know about.
Citations
- Copyvio score looks fantastic at 13.8%!!!
- :)
- uDiscover Music → uDiscoverMusic on ref 20, plus this is reliable due to the author's Record Collector work
- Fixed.
Sources
- WP:OVERLINKof the Beatles on "Free as a Bird" source
- Fixed.
Final comments and verdict
- On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 09:03, 1 June 2021 (UTC)