Talk:Domestic violence in Kenya

Domestic violence in Kenya was nominated as a Social sciences and society good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (March 3, 2018). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

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I am interested in developing this article. This topic will include content such as violence against women during childbirth, STD’s related to domestic violence, and effects of ethnicity and education on gender based violence. My user page (Sshah11) has various sources that I will use to write this article. Sshah11 (talk) 16:07, 19 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Contents

Overview

This section will give general information about domestic violence in Kenya. It will include statistics about physical and sexual violence. For example, it will include how many men and women are victims of abuse every year, the age range of these victims, and the percentage of victims that do not speak out against this abuse in Kenya. This would be a very broad background paragraph leading into the rest of the article, and would give the reader a general idea of the sheer amount of people that are affected by domestic violence issues in Kenya before they go on to read the rest of the article.

Physical & Sexual Violence

This paragraph will go into detail about the domestic violence that men and women face in Kenya. It will include information about the prevalence of physical, mental, and sexual violence, and will go into detail on how abuse in Kenya is unique from in other countries. Specifically, it will also discuss gender based violence of pregnant women and child sexual abuse. In addition, this part of the article will provide information about the HIV/AIDS spreading that results as a result of domestic violence.

Influencing Factors

a. Patriarchalism

This section will focus on the underlying causes of the prevalence of domestic violence in Kenya. Specifically, the country’s history of patriarchalism and how it relates to gender equality. Because Kenya was once colonized by the British, a society in which only men could bring wealth to the family, women have always been seen as inferior. This societal view has continued into the present, and often perpetuates the cycle of domestic abuse that many women face.

b. Education

Another reason that domestic violence is so prevalent in Kenya is due to the lack of education about gender equality. Therefore, in this section I will discuss the education gaps between men and women that exist in Kenya, and how that leads to an increase in the number of victims of domestic violence. In addition, I will add general information about sex education in Kenyan schools, and showcase how the education disparities relating to this topic that Kenyan children and young adults face often lead to domestic abuse.

Responses

This major section will focus on how the Kenyan society has responded to the issue of domestic abuse in the past. The first part of the section will focus on the current and past laws that the government has implemented to help combat this issue. In recent years, the government has passed acts such as the Protection Against domestic violence and the Matrimonial Property Act. This section will also discuss social movements and organizations that have arisen in Kenya against domestic violence.

a. Laws

b. Social Activism and OrganizationsSshah11 (talk) 01:07, 3 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This outline is what I plan to write for this article. Are there any other topics that I should include?Sshah11 (talk) 00:42, 3 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Seems good to me as the creator of this article if you have the information and the sources do it Sshah11 (talk). Dwanyewest (talk) 06:57, 3 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I have written a draft of the article in my sandbox. It does not encompass every aspect of the article but covers the main ideas.Sshah11 (talk) 14:40, 10 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This is a great article! I learned a lot about this topic and you presented the information very effectively. I would recommend that you reorganize the article so that the sections sexual coercion and mental health flow better with the rest of the article. I would suggest making them into subsections so that the reader knows why they are relevant to domestic violence. I would also suggest that you include the dates of the studies so that the reader knows that it was recently studied and that the statement is not your opinion. Great job and good luck! Lramkelawan97 (talk) 04:40, 27 October 2017 (UTC)lramkelawan97[reply]

Overall, your article is comprehensive, relevant, and easy to follow! You did a great job gathering information from reliable sources and organizing them into the sections that you did. Your piece maintains neutrality, presenting the information in an unbiased way. My main suggestion would be to expand on the section on mental health and social efforts. I feel that supplementing these with more information would make your article stronger! Readers and I would be interested in learning more about the effect of domestic violence on mental health (women in general and women in Kenya) and the social efforts being done in response to the domestic violence. Furthermore, another suggestion I have is to add more links to and from your article. Perhaps consider linking the key terms "mental health" and "World Health Organization." Finally, although the lead you have right now is good, including something about mental health and responses would make it even better! Jk956 (talk) 21:23, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I have updated the lead section to include a summary of the article. Sshah11 (talk) 02:05, 7 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article seems mostly to be based on primary sources (see

I was going to review the article, mostly because one I nominated is further down on the same list and reviews are going slow. But I'm a bit concerned with the first sentence and how the article is defined. It points at only violence against women. Granted, most domestic violence is against women, and it may be close to 100% women suffering from domestic violence in Kenya. But if there is a small percentage of men who are domestically abused in Kenya, the first sentence would exclude that, and thus the article would not be comprehensive in its coverage, falling short on one of the Good Article criteria. If the first sentence is adjusted in the manner of other "Domestic violence in" articles on Wikipedia, or a source is found that identifies 100% of domestic violence in Kenya is against women, I'll review the article. --Airborne84 (talk) 00:37, 16 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Airborne84 (talk · contribs) 00:53, 23 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Beginning review. --Airborne84 (talk) 00:53, 23 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I didn't find any copyright violations of text, disambiguation links, or issues with external links using the Wiki tools.

I don't find the article at GA standards right now. Below are my initial notes with some recommendations to improve. I'll wait for a few days for a response before failing or holding.

1. Most concerning was this image in the article [1] This may be a copyright violation as it was uploaded by the nominator under a license and it is not clear that the nominator holds the copyright or has permission. This should be clarified or the image removed.

2. The references appear at first glance to be from a decent variety of journals that are reliable sources. However, the sources each list a page range which appears to comprise the entire article within a larger work. That's fine, but the citations should also point to the specific page(s) that support the statements in the article to allow readers to access the underlying idea (and reviewers to check if properly sourced).

3. The lede section summarizes the article, but in a fairly stilted manner. Paragraph three is a single sentence. In other words, it's a bit under the threshold for

Good Article criterion (GAC) #1

—well written. Maybe try 2–3 paragraphs and try to wrap the passages together a bit more.

4. I'm concerned that some of the sentences may be too absolute and could present a POV, falling afoul of GAC #4. For example, "men are also threatened by women making independent choices." All Kenyan men? Actually, all the sentences in that particular paragraph save the topic sentence present the same appearance of being 100 percent absolute. Please check the sources (I didn't have the exact page numbers, see comment #1 above), and caveat statements as appropriate.

5. The "Responses" section has a rather abrupt one-sentence intro paragraph. I don't think there's a rule/guideline on this in the GAC, so won't say it has to change to be a GA, but I might do a little more explaining if there is to be a section intro. Again, this isn't a required fix, IMO. Just a note.

6. The "Government" sub-section doesn't really fit into the "responses" section. The material in this section precedes responses. I recommend putting this in a background section at the start of the article in the manner of Domestic violence in India to set the framework within which the domestic violence occurs. You could also do it immediately before the "Responses" section, but if the "Government" material is part of a broader context paragraph at the outset, it will help frame all the material in the article—not just the responses.

7. In general, although I'm not an expert on the subject, the article appears to be broad in its coverage. My quick review of other similar articles on Wikipedia didn't reveal any major missing aspects. The article also appears to be stable.

8. As a side note, I was happy to see

en dashes

in page ranges. Nice!

If the above are addressed, or someone identifies they are working them in the coming few days, I'll review again. --Airborne84 (talk) 02:27, 23 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]