Talk:Friedrich Wilhelm von Seydlitz/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 29 April 2017 (UTC)
This article is in good shape. A few comments:
- I assume he was a Generalleutnant, suggest linking it
Done
- suggest "Mad Margrave" consistently throughout rather than a mix of italics and scare quotes
- suggest linking subaltern
Done
- suggest choosing Pour le Merite or Pour le Mérite and keeping it consistent, including in the infobox
- suggest Seydlitz was born on 3 February 1721, in Kalkar in the Duchy of Cleves, where his father was stationed. His father, Daniel Florian Seydlitz, was a major of Prussian cavalry with the Curassier Regiment Markgraf Friedrich Wilhelm of Brandenburg-Schwedt No. 5. The "Curassier Regiment" should probably have initial caps, as it appears to be the proper name of the Regiment.
Done
- there is a space before Note 2
Done
- repetition re apt and aptly. Suggest "well" for the latter
Done
- there is an inconsistency about the Markgraf's given name, in the unit title he is Wilhelm, when introduced he is William
- suggest and a nephew otherwise it is a bit confusing about who the nephew was
- if the Old Dessauer isn't mentioned again, suggest deleting mention of his nickname, it doesn't seem to add anything
- "Mad" Margrave should probably be "Mad Margrave" if that is what he was called
- link horsemanship at first mention
Done
- as a page to the Mad Margrave should probably be as a page to the Margrave, as it is currently a little too informal
Done
- consistency with Cürassier and Curassier, and link at first mention
Done
- perhaps explicitly point out that he was appointed as a cornet in his father's old regiment rather than use an abbreviated unit title
Done but earlier in the paragraph also mentions that this was his father's old regiment. Now it's mentioned twice' isn't that a bit overkill?
- suggest Several times Seydlitz came to the notice of the King
Done
- the Prussian line
- link Habsburg monarchy at the first mention of Austrian
Done
- cuirassier and coup d'œil are overlinked
- link hussars at first mention
Done
- should Count Nassau be redlinked? Or would be not be notable?
- suggest Seydlitz served through the Second Silesian War as you have just talked about another man
- there are two mentions of his promotion to major, suggest linking major and combining them
Done
- should Count Burghausen be redlinked? Not clear who it is, so took it out
- suggest He developed tactics for cavalry that included hussars, cuirassiers and dragoons, and presented them to the King. or something similar
Done
- suggest They had to be capable
Done
- suggest and be prepared
Done
- suggest with accuracy or reloaded
Done
- suggest pattern for the rest
Done
- where they regrouped
Done
- At the Prussian debacle and on 14 October 1758 same with the next date
Done
- in
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- it isn't clear what happen to his health "undermined by his experience with the Margrave"? syphilis removed, mentioned later.
Done
- and was divorced needs a full stop
Done
- His early biographer
Done
- but his biographer Bernhard Poten
Done
- in Berlin , honoring needs a space dropped
Done
- the Memorials section should probably be rolled into one para
Done
- the licensing of File:Friedrich wilhelm von seydlitz.jpg needs work, File:Major General von Seydlitz pipe Prussian cavalry Battle of Rossbach Richard Knötel.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:Seydlitz at Rossbach.jpg
- these are fixed. I swapped out the one in the info box for one with better attributes. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
- File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:1872 Lulves Standbild Generals von Seydlitz anagoria.JPG. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:51, 2 May 2017 (UTC)
- there is an unclosed pair of square brackets in the infobox
Done
That's me done. Placing on hold for comments to be addressed. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:20, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
- Thank you. @Peacemaker67: Comments addressed I think. I added a mite on family. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)
- auntieruth - just the two US-PD tags (above) to do. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:57, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
- @Peacemaker67: they are already there. PD-old-auto-1923|1815 shows up as public domain in US auntieruth (talk) 22:40, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
- I thought PD-old was insufficient, a separate PD-US tag is needed, is it not? That is what the template indicates. Perhaps Nikkimaria can advise. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:55, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
- {{PD-old-auto-1923}} provides a US PD tag automatically, but the two images flagged above on 2 May do not use that tag - they should if it applies, or another US PD tag if it does not. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:27, 4 May 2017 (UTC)
- I had already used PD-old-auto-1923|1815}} and PD-old-auto-1923|1814}} on the images, which should have sufficed, right? I added the tag Nikkimaria gave too, but it simply gives the same text, but not as much detail. anyway, it's done. Nikkimaria and Peacemaker67, please advise.... auntieruth (talk) 14:23, 4 May 2017 (UTC)
- Is it possible we're not talking about the same images? I'm looking at File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg and File:1872_Lulves_Standbild_Generals_von_Seydlitz_anagoria.JPG, both of which have only PD-old. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:25, 5 May 2017 (UTC)
- LOL, of course different files. PD-old-auto-1923|creator's death added to both of those auntieruth (talk) 14:24, 5 May 2017 (UTC)
- Ok, all good now, passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:42, 6 May 2017 (UTC)