Talk:Mario Buda/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 02:30, 1 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the

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Good Article review progress box WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Per
  WP:INFONAT
  , use of the "nationality" parameter in an infobox should be avoided when citizenry can be easily inferred – in Buda's case, he was born and died in Italy, so it's safe to say we know he's of Italian nationality
• Link Milwaukee in lede

Early life and careers

• Link the first instance of anarchism in the body
• Two sentences in a row start with "Buda" (Buda emigrated to the United States, Buda went to Colorado). One should be rephrased
• Delink
  MOS:OVERLINK
• Link "strikes" to Strike action
• "to prepare to fight in a revolution" → "in preparation for revolutionary fighting"

Bombings

• Delink Bay View incident, which is linked above
• "Buda, under the fake name "Mario Rusca", was also likely" → "Operating under the pseudonym "Mario Rusca", Buda was likely also"
• There should be quotation marks around "Mike Boda" just as there are around "Mario Rusca"
• Link "bootlegger" to Rum-running, our article on liquor bootlegging
• "could have meant their" → "could lead to their"

Return to Italy

• When did he return to Providence?
  • Sources do not say—his whereabouts aren't exactly known between him being in hiding and him leaving the country czar 05:26, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
• Combine the last two paragraphs, as they all have to do with his later life and would avoid having 1-2 sentence paragraphs

Personal life

• Two neutrality issues in this section:
  • First, "He was known to be" by whom? (I assume his fellow anarchists, but this should be specified and not in Wikipedia's voice)
  • Second, the phrase intensely tenacious, loyal, with tough conviction in the Wiki's voice comes across as a value judgment of an ethnic group
    • Should be straightforward that it's as described by the historian but I can add in-line attribution if that helps. czar 05:26, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

• Very good

General comments

• All images are in the public domain and are relevant to the article
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig score looks great at 18%

Reply

• Thanks! I've addressed the first batch. I wouldn't expect a general reader from English-speaking Europe to know what Wisconsin is, so I'll keep it linked. czar 02:13, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies for the brief wait, I have been traveling and grappling with some last-minute changes provided by the school district in which I teach. Putting on hold now. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 16:20, 6 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, @GhostRiver, and no worries—I appreciate the review! Believe I've addressed the above, when you have a chance to take a look. czar 05:26, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for making those changes. I added a small phrase at the start of the Return to Italy subhead in order to help with the flow, but otherwise, I'm happy to pass this article. — GhostRiver 16:09, 7 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]