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Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.
Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 02:16, 30 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox
The single cover image needs an alt.
I don't think that the cover image is acceptable here; it wasn't made specifically for "No Man's Land", so this cannot be the official cover, even if it was used for the promotional CD singles or whatever it was used for
Change the genre from 'Rock music' to 'Rock'
The track listing's numbers are messed up; it skips from 13 to 3...?
Remove the "Miscellaneous" part from the infobox
Lead
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If 'heavy metal' is mentioned here, shouldn't it be mentioned above as well?
"lovers life." → "lover's life."
"favourable to mixed" → "mixed to positive"
You need a period (.) at the end of the final sentence in this paragraph
Paragraph 3
"Because it was released digitally, "No Man's Land"..." → "Due to "No Man's Land" being released digitally, it..."
Shouldn't the semi-colon be a colon?
Background
Remove the semi-colon after "main record labels"
Remove "has" after "Mr. Blistah..."
Composition
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Nice addition of a sample!
If she herself described the song as "Heavy metal", it should definitely be included in the genre(s) above in the infobox
Paragraph 2
Remove "online store"
Insert "the" before "English and Japanese language"
Insert "s" after "English and Japanese language"
Release
You could probably add this entire section to 'Background' and change the section title to 'Background and release'
What do you mean by "Because Japonesque was released in Taiwan, the song and its music video was released on all formats?"; I don't see the relationship between the two
"the song and its music video was released on all formats" → "the song and its music video were released on all formats"
"same released date" → "same release date"
Critical and commercial responses
Rename as "Critical reception"
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"Upon its release," → "After its release,"
"favourable to mixed" → "mixed to positive"
You use "commended" and "commending" a lot; you can also use "appreciated", "enjoyed", etc.
Remove the link to Asian Junkie; it will be perfectly fine without one
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You can remove this entirely; it's too short to warrant a separate paragraph and it only charted in one country–see my point?
Music video
Background and synopsis
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Why is the text centered in the picture to the right?
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"cited it" → "declared it"
Release, controversy, and ban
Unfortunately, I am not fluent (or even near fluent) in Japanese. And I do not know of how to contact a Japanese Wikipedian; since you are right about the original research part, I would remove the section entirely, and from the lead as well; let me know what you decide to do!
Live performances and other inclusions
Remove this: "The performance at Kanagawa Arena on September 8 received positive remarks from music critics;" (It's unnecessary since each performance is the same.)
End of GA Review:
Another very good article; just some tidying up needs to happen. The music video controversy section should be removed so it doesn't include WP:OR. Thanks again! Carbrera (talk) 03:00, 2 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]
WP:Original research category. I'll let you know once I'm done re-reading it. Cheers, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk·contribs} 02:26, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply