Talk:Pest of the West

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 22:49, 22 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

• Image: "…playing in a Western desert of Dead Eye Gulch." -> I feel that 'of' should either be 'in' or 'near', or something similar. 'of' just doesn't sound right.
  • Done.
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• Plot: "…have famous relatives who had helped Bikini Bottom." Helped the city do what?
  • Done.
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• Plot: "…named Krusty Kantina…" add 'the' between 'named' and 'Krusty'
  • Done.
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• Plot: Any idea why SpongeBuck has to face Dead Eye Plankton? Did he get challenged to a duel?
  • Done?
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• Plot: "Pecos Patrick tells to defeat Dead Eye Plankton, SpongeBuck must smack him several times." What? There's something wrong here…
  • Done..
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• Plot: Did SpongeBuck step on Dead Eye accidentally, or on purpose? Maybe clarify.
  • Done.
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• Production: The second sentence of the first paragraph really belongs in the "Reception" section
  • Done.
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• Production: "…audience[…] And" There needs to be a space between 'audience' and the bracket. Also, decapitalize the 'A' in 'And'
  • Done.
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• Production: All of the talk on how Nickelodeon promoted the episode on the internet really belongs in the "Reception" section, as well
  • Why do you think so? I think the "promotion" is part of the episode's production.
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• Produciton: "The featured song in the episode called "Idiot Friends", performed in the epilogue, was…" -> "The song featured in the episode's epilogue, "Idiot Friends", was…"
  • Done.
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• Production: There's hardly an info on production in this section. It's mostly info on the episode's airing, and DVD release. This is a problem.
  • Added some. Do you think it's OK now?
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• Cultural references: "featured" should be "features"
  • Done.
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• Cultural references: "Other western conventions in films get spoofed, as well." Like what? Please expand upon this, or remove it.
  • Removed.
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• Reception: "shoot" is too un-encyclopedic. Maybe use "raise" or "move"; same goes for "handily", just remove that word.
  • Done.
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• Reception: "Mavis cited his favorite line: "I'll bet you're somebody's famous poop-covered ancestor."" This is just kind of out-of-the-blue. It doesn't really add to the reception section, and it doesn't even identify who said it
  • Removed.
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• Reception: I feel uncomfortable called either Yahoo! Voices or Blogcritics reliable sources, since they have little to no editorial oversight. Every time I remember trying to use them in an article, I was told to remove them.

  If we decide to keep the two, "Dunces and Dragons" needs quotes around it

  Furthermore, the whole "Blogcritics reviewer's kid wants to know if they had an ancestor", while cute, doesn't add anything to the episode or its reception, so I suggest you remove it

  • I think the two should be kept. Fixed Dunces an...
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• Reception: "…was negative on the DVD…" -> negative towards, negative about, etc. "on" is just the wrong preposition to use.
  • Done.
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• Reception: The segue from the negative review (DVD Verdict) to the review about the song seems a little abrupt. I'd move the info about the song to another paragraph.
  • Thanks. :)
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• References: You can link a lot of the works/publishers in the references, such as
  Newswire, AllMusic, Entertainment Weekly, Deseret News, Chicago Sun-Times
  , etc.
  • Done.
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• References: What's with the British style dating (DD MM YYYY)? I used to do that too, but since this is an American article, it's preferred that the dates be MM, DD YYYY.
  • Done.
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All in all, there are quite a few prose issues. Also, I'm worrying about the near lack of production information. I will place this on hold for seven days for the changes to be made.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:00, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much Gen. Quon for the review! I hope the article is OK now to pass GAC. Also, I have added some prod info. Thanks! :)

t • c) 05:11, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply

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It looks a lot better now. Now that there is a merchandising section, I think maybe the DVD info should be moved there.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:08, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done. :)

t • c) 09:05, 24 September 2013 (UTC)[reply

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Looks good. I will pass.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 20:10, 24 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much Gen. Quon! :) Cheers!

t • c) 09:40, 25 September 2013 (UTC)[reply

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