Talk:Regine Rocks

Regine Rocks has been listed as one of the Music good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it. Review: April 13, 2024. (Reviewed version).

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Nominator: Pseud 14 (talk · contribs) 18:09, 2 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Theepicosity (talk · contribs) 14:49, 3 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Article looks very good!

@Pseud 14: Sorry it's taken me so long, I was on a trip for a few days. I have checked your new edits and will finish the rest of the review shortly. ^^

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   I would check the section titled "Concert Synopsis" to make sure that it maintains a good encyclopedic tone; there seems to be a lot of extra prose which kinda reads like someone is documenting their experience there, rather than just sticking to the facts. As an example, the sentence "Wearing a ruffled skirt, she then sang Led Zeppelin's "Stairway to Heaven" (1971)."

   Thanks for taking the review Theepicosity. I believe even for FA or GA standards involving concerts or events, the synopsis summarizes it in a way were it is acceptable to describe or detail wardrobe, stage design, transitions between each segments, production descriptions, themes, differences for each acts or sections of the show, etc. (similar FA examples include R2K: The Concert and Freedom and similar GA examples include ArtRave: The Artpop Ball, 24K Magic World Tour, and The Mrs. Carter Show World Tour) Pseud 14 (talk) 17:46, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Of course, you can describe wardrobe and stage design and whatever else is relevant! The problem is in the prose itself. I had meant to put an example, but i think i forgot:

"Wearing a ruffled skirt, she then sang Led Zeppelin's "Stairway to Heaven" (1971)." should be changed to something like "She then changed to a ruffled skirt and sang Led Zeppelin's "Stairway to Heaven" (1971)." As the article is written now, I'm not sure if she actually changed wardrobe or if the "ruffled skirt" is just the layered tartan skirt from earlier. If it's the latter, redundancies for the sake of dramatization should be avoided in favor of clarity.

As another example, "A mash-up of Aerosmith's "Dream On" (1973) and "I Don't Want to Miss a Thing" (1998) were performed, as Velasquez returns atop the iron-throne platform and is lifted above the stage with a brief pyrotechnics display at the conclusion of the number." should be changed to "She then performed mash-up of Aerosmith's "Dream On" (1973) and "I Don't Want to Miss a Thing" (1998), and returned to the iron-throne platform. The number concluded with a brief pyrotechnics display as she was lifted above the stage." This removes the present tense and keeps it in line with the rest of the article.

In general, the section should be rewritten a bit to clarify the order of events, and avoid matching the drama of the event itself. By just listing the facts and the sequence of events, the section will flow a lot nicer and will be much easier to understand. Hope this helps! Theepicosity (talk) 11:51, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Theepicosity: Thanks. Made the edits and some revisions on the section. Let me know if anything else still stands out. Pseud 14 (talk) 13:50, 5 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I've reread it now, it looks much better! Theepicosity (talk) 15:04, 11 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

1. B. It complies with the

   list incorporation

   :

   Lead section looks really good!

2. Is it
   source spot-check
   ?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with

   the layout style guideline

   :

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   Two things I noticed: 1. The section "Concert Synopsis" has no in-line citations at all. It's possible that there is evidence elsewhere in the article for the claims in this section, but it isn't cited in the section. 2. Citing from Ticketmaster and Facebook is highly questionable... both of the Facebook links likely have better sources, so you should only use it if you can't find anything better. The Tickmaster link seems plainly wrong, and it should probably be removed from the article and replaced with a correct source.