Talk:Right There (Nicole Scherzinger song)/GA1

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I will start reviewing this today, however it may run into tomorrow. --K. Peake 07:51, 19 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • WP:OVERLINK
    of Jim Jonsin in the producer(s) parameter
Where a producer is credited by their legal name in the writer field, I've always linked it so that its clear who we're on about
fixed
  • "It was released on" → "The song was released on" but it is not written out in prose that the song was released under the labels
fixed
  • "as the third single from Killer Love, it was remixed to feature" → "as the third single, a remix was recorded featuring"
fixed
  • Remove duplicate usage of "Written by"
fixed
  • "Daniel Morris and co-written and" → "Daniel Morris, and co-written and"
fixed
  • ""Right There" island-flavored midtempo" → "it is an island-flavored midtempo"
fixed
  • Remove the selection for release sentence since that is not notable here
fixed
  • ""Right There" was intended to be" → "The song was originally intended to be" moving this to be the sentence before the writing/comp one
fixed
  • "urban production which stood out from the disco-tinged songs" → "urban production, which stood out from the mainstream songs" to be more consistent with the body
fixed
  • "for its playful nature" → "for the playful nature"
fixed
  • Remove the release year of "Rude Boy" since this is not notable for the lead
fixed
  • Remove the "Edge of Seventeen" comparison because that is only mentioned by one reviewer
fixed
  • "by calling the song a" → "by calling it a"
fixed
  • "In the UK, "Right There" debuted at number three, giving Scherzinger her third consecutive top three single" → "In the United Kingdom, the song debuted at number three, giving Scherzinger her fourth consecutive top-ten single" per what the body actually says
fixed
  • "It also peaked in the top-ten" → "Outside of the UK, the song peaked in the top-ten" per this being a new para
fixed
  • "New Zealand and on" → "New Zealand, and on"
fixed
fixed
  • Wikilink
    MOS:LINK2SECT
    , also make sure this and any other chart positions are written out in prose
  • "within the top-forty on" → "within the top 40 on" per
    MOS:NUM
fixed
  • ""Right There" was certified 2× Platinum by the" → "The song was certified double platinum in Australia by the"
fixed
fixed
  • Remove the year-end charts, as these aren't notable here
fixed
  • Merge the fourth para with the third per overly short size
fixed
  • Merely cut the first music video sentence to stating it was directed by Paul Hunter, as nobody wants to read background info in the lead
fixed
  • ""Right There" was the most watched video on YouTube on its day of" → "The visual was the most watched video on YouTube on the day of" removing the Billboard part, as it is not notable who reported that in the lead
fixed
  • "while MTV also gave the song a similar accolade on its website too." → "while it scored a similar accolade on MTV's website." with the wikilink
fixed
  • Mention what year(s) the performances were in
fixed
  • I've gotten up to here for now. Got a bit more to do re: charts. >> Lil-unique1 (talk) — 20:52, 19 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • I think all of these things have been addressed >> Lil-unique1 (talk) — 16:10, 26 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

  • Remove the captions from the group of images and instead identify by placing (left) after Jim Jonsion's name and (right) after 50 Cent
fixed
  • "would go on to top charts in the UK in" → "would go on to top the chart in"
fixed
  • "or third overall when" → "though was her third overall when"
fixed
  • "with the
    MOS:THEMUSIC
fixed
  • "a month later it was confirmed that "Right There", helmed by" → "a month later, it was confirmed that "Right There", produced by"
fixed
  • "but also the lead and first single for" → "but also the lead single for" with the wikilink, as lead means first single
fixed
  • "was penned for" → "was scheduled for"
fixed
  • "reported that Jonsin was set work with" → "reported that Jim Jonsin was set to work with" per this not being his real name:fixed
  • Remove the "Coconut Tree" feature since that is not notable at all
fixed
  • "On April 1, 2011, "Right There" was" → "On April 1, the song was"
fixed
  • "began getting airplay on" → "began garnering airplay on"
fixed
  • Mention the labels at the point of release
fixed
  • "A week later it was serviced" → "A week later, the song was serviced"
fixed
fixed
  • Remove later in June from the start of the sentence since the June dates are all mentioned there anyway
fixed
  • ""He Goes Down" which samples" → ""He Goes Down", which samples" with the pipe
fixed
  • ""
    MOS:QUOTE
fixed

Recording and production

  • ""Right There" is a" → "Musically, "Right There" is a" moving the genres to music and lyrics, though keep this sentencew ith the writing part only here
fixed
  • "by Jonsin for" → "by Jim Jonsin for"
fixed
  • Remove excess full-stop after Harvey Mason Jr. since his name can end the sentence in this context
fixed
fixed
fixed
  • "with guitars and bass by" → "and guitars and bass by"
fixed
  • "David Boyd and Michael Daley" → "David Boyd, and Michael Daley"
fixed
fixed

Music and lyrics

  • Make the genres sentence the first of this section
fixed
  • The MTV and Rap-Up sentences should come before the Digital Spy one since they are about the comp
fixed
  • "twang" which complimented" → "twang", which compliments"
fixed
  • Mention the name of the MTV Buzzworthy writer
fixed
  • "the song was built on an" → "the song is built on an"
fixed
  • "It was compared to being a similar technique and vibe to" → "It was seen as a similar technique and vibe to"
fixed
  • Mention the name of the Rap-Up writer
fixed
  • "Among the lyrics are the lines" → "Among the lyrics are" and this sentence should have the Digital Spy one directly before it
fixed
  • "my body" which segues" → "my body", which segues"
fixed
  • Remove duplicate wikilink on Destiny's Child
fixed

Critical reception

  • "AOL Radio's Nadine Cheung praised "Right There"" → "Cheung praised "Right There""
not done, new section
  • "and "uncanny lyrical references"." → "and an "uncanny lyrical reference"." per the source
done
  • "MTV's Eliot Glazier agreed with this notion," → "Glazier agreed with this notion,"
not done, new section
already done
  • 4 Music → 4Music with the wikilink
done
  • "of the best bits of the album." → "of the highlights of the album."
done
  • ""better and polite version of" → ""better and polite version" of"
done
  • "Lewis Corner of Digital Spy awarded the song" → "Corner awarded the song"
not done, new section
  • "five stars describing it" → "five stars, describing it"
done
  • "rating and commented that" → "rating and commented," however, the source does not mention this song
done, it looks like the archive link was wrong. This was mentioned by EW, link updated
  • "ecky Bain of
    Idolator
    agreed, saying"
done
  • "to this song." However she said," → "to this song". However, she said," per MOS:QUOTE
done
  • Italicise DJ Booth
done
  • "However not all reviews were positive," → "However, not all reviews were positive."
done
  • "He also said that the song" → "He said that the song" per also being used in the quote
done
  • "sound like
    DIY
    instructions"."
done
  • "wrote that the "Scherzinger" → "wrote that "Scherzinger"
done
  • "cod-Jamaican 'Right There'."" → "cod-Jamaican 'Right There'"."
done
  • "of Pop Dust was unimpressed of the song criticizing for" → "of Popdust was unimpressed with the song for"
done
  • "and lazy lyrics."" → "and lazy lyrics"."
done
  • Pipe ITV1 to
    ITV (TV channel)
done
  • Mention when the interview was
done

Commercial performance

  • Per the rules on chart positions being ordered geographically, make the US stuff the first para and follow that with the other countries; Canada should succeed it, but the current order of the other countries following these two would be fine. Also, remember what I said previously about how any chart positions mentioned in the lead must be written out here too.
I structured this around where the song was released first. Plus the UK comes before the US alphabetically?
  • "number fifty-eight on the UK Singles Chart on the chart dated" → "number 58 on the UK Singles Chart for the issue dated" per
    MOS:NUM
done
  • "fourth week it leaped from number fourteen to number three selling" → "fourth week, the song lept from number fourteen to number three, selling"
done
  • [32] should only be invoked every two sentences per
    WP:OVERCITE
done
  • "top ten single as a solo artist behind" → "top-ten single as a solo artist, following"
done
  • "with The Pussycat Dolls, it is her eighteenth top-forty" → "with the Pussycat Dolls, it is her 18th top-40"
done
  • "of 200,000 copies of the single." → "of 200,000 copies in the UK."
done
  • "in the United Kingdom and was one of the bestselling" → "in the UK and was one of the best-selling" but the copies are not sourced
done, removed the "best selling" bit as this is not true/subjective. 69 on the end of year top 100 is not best selling.
  • "remained on the chart" → "remained on the UK Singles Chart"
done
  • "In Ireland "Right There" debuted at number twenty-two" → "In Ireland, "Right There" debuted at number 22"
done
  • "number seven where it remained in the top ten" → "number seven and it remained in the top-ten"
done
  • "at number thirty-four" → "at number 34"
done
done
  • "on its fifth week peaking" → "in its fifth week, peaking"
done
done
  • "at number eight staying for" → "at number eight on the chart, staying there for"
done
  • "been certified 2x platinum" → "been certified double platinum"
done
  • "140,000 copies of the single." → "140,000 copies in Australia."
done
  • "In the United States, the song" → "In the US, the song" per
    MOS:US
done
done
  • The fall to number 97 is not sourced; an entirely different trajectory is mentioned by the ref
done
  • "on the Hot 100, it stayed at" → "on the Hot 100; the song stayed at"
done
  • Remove the due to downloads part from the start of the sentence because this is implied
done
done
done
  • "shipments of over 500,000 copies." → "selling 500,000 certified units in the US."
done
  • "peaked at number forty four." → "peaked at number 44."
done

Live performances

  • Remove wikilink on 50 Cent
done
done
  • "a team of ten backup dancers" → "a team of 10 backup dancers" per MOS:NUM
done
  • "jeans and dangling chain," → "jeans, and dangling chain,"
done
  • Mention Kaufman as being of MTV
done
  • "hula as "seductive."" → "hula as "seductive"." per MOS:QUOTE
done
  • "saying that "The ex-Pussycat Doll heated up" → "saying that Scherzinger "heated up"
done
  • "performing [her] single."" → "performing [her] single"."
done
  • Introduce Amy Sciarretto
done
  • "praised Nicole Scherzinger's performance complimenting on her" → "praised Scherzinger's performance, complimenting her"
done
  • "Sciarretto said "Scherzinger’s" → "Sciarretto said, "Scherzinger's"
done
  • "In June, Scherzinger" → "In June 2011, Scherzinger" but the source does not mention that she flew there and change to the UK
done
  • "black ankle boots."" → "black ankle boots"."
done
  • "by musician Mike Stock who described Scherzinger's performance" → "by musician Mike Stock, who described it"
done
  • "she performed it again" → "Scherzinger performed it again"
done
done
done
done
  • "in the United States first performing" → "in the US, first performing" per MOS:US
done
  • Pipe eighth season to
    So You Think You Can Dance (American season 8)
done
done
  • Remove wikilink on Rap-Up
done
  • "described the whole performance. "Dressed" → "described the whole performance: "Dressed"
done

Music video

Background and synopsis

  • Wikilink music video on the img text and first mention in prose
done
  • Remove wikilink on Los Angeles
done
  • "on "Whatever You Like"." → "on the visual for "Whatever You Like"."
done
  • "Scherzinger in interview to MTV News she said," → "In an interview with MTV News, she said,"
done
done
  • "premiered on VEVO.com on" → "premiered through Vevo on" with the wikilink
done
  • "premiered the same day, one" → "premiered the same day: one"
done
  • "with 50 Cent saying, He" → "with 50 Cent, saying, "He"
done
  • Remove wikilink on music video
done
  • Remove wikilink on 50 Cent
done
  • Shouldn't things like the green screen have sources for them?
done, it was lready in one of the other sources
  • "As the first verse begins Scherzinger" → "As the first verse begins, Scherzinger"
done
  • "walking on a ghostly downtown" → "as she walks around a ghostly downtown"
done
done
  • "space-turned-nightclub" this reads weirdly – please clarify
done
  • "is a closeup of Scherzinger," → "is a closeup of her,"
done

Reception

  • Remove pipe on Idolator
done
  • "liked the video stating, "'Right There' is upbeat," → "liked the video, stating it "is upbeat,"
done
  • "video should be."" → "video should be"." per MOS:QUOTE
done
  • Italicise Buzzworthy
done
  • "reminded that she used to lead the..." → "reminded him that Scherzinger used to be the lead singer of the Pussycat Dolls." to be less wordy
done
  • "negatively criticized of 50 Cent's appearance" → "negatively criticized 50 Cent's appearance"
done
  • "of product placement of Belvedere calling it "bit much" but she later writes" → "of product placement, calling it a "bit much", but she later wrote"
done
  • "and totally silly fashion."" → "and totally silly fashion"."
done
  • "commented, "effortless moves" → "commented that "effortless moves"
done
  • "at number forty-nine on" → "at number 49 on" per MOS:NUM
done
  • Remove wikilink on MTV
done
  • "was one of the most watched music video" → "was one of the most watched music videos"
done

Track listing

done

Credits and personnel

  • Remove img since this is not necessary to show the recording studio
done
  • Shouldn't 50 Cent and any other personnel besides Scherzinger be wikilinked?
done
  • Use {{
    spaced ndash
    }}     so there is the right space between credits and personnel
I see the template but I don't know where this has come from or why it is a thing. I can't see a policy reason for this. {{
spaced ndash
}} generates a dash with non-breaking spaces, however since there's no potential for each credit/personnel to split lines I don't understand where this rule has come from.

Charts and certifications

Weekly charts

  • List of record charts and positions → Chart performance for "Right There"
done
  • The Romanian position is not sourced
fixed, found better sourcing and actually higher position than originally quoted

Year-end charts

  • Australia (ARIA) Urban Singles → Australia Urban (ARIA)
done

Certifications

  • See
    MOS:TABLECAPTION
    ]
done

Release history

  • Add a separate col for the refs
done
done
  • I don't think the additional [106] is needed for the United States
done
  • Split contemporary and rhythmic radio into two separate rows
done

References

done
  • Remove United Business Media from refs 2 and 32, only wikilinking Music Week on the first one
done
done
  • Cite Digital Spy as publisher instead on refs 4, 17 and 19
note done, Digital Spy is a website
  • Ref 7 should link iTunes or iTunes Store; cite as the same one consistently for all these refs and only link on this instance
done
  • Remove BBC Radio 1Xtra from ref 8 since BBC is the publisher
done
  • Remove or replace ref 14 per
    WP:SELFPUB
couldn't find this one - I went back and reviewed from the date you started the review and couldn't find ref 14 that was self-published
  • WP:OVERLINK
    of MTV News on refs 15, 49 and 50, also remove the other website/publisher parameters from these
done
  • 4 Music → 4Music on ref 22 with the wikilink
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Digital Spy on ref 23 and remove Hachette Fillapaachi Medias
done
  • Remove the publisher from refs 24 and 62
done
  • Fix
    MOS:QWQ
    issues with refs 25 and 68, also remove Buzz Media and fix WP:OVERLINK of Idolator
done
  • Wikilink The Guardian on ref 27
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 29 and change to Popdust
done
  • Remove DMG from ref 30
done
  • Remove wikilink on Official Charts Company on ref 31
done, changed to OCC instead, doesn't need to be Zobbel
  • Charts Plus → UKChartsPlus on ref 34 with the wikilink, citing as work/website instead
done
  • Only cite Irish Singles Chart as publisher on refs 35 and 36, solely linking on the first instance
done
  • Remove Hung Medien from ref 38
done
  • Remove the publisher from refs 41, 44, 45 and 46
done
  • Remove the publisher from ref 42
done
  • Solely cite Rap-Up as work/website on refs 51, 59, 60, 63 and 106, removing any overlinks and excess publisher/websites
done
  • Solely cite
    PopCrush
     as work/website instead on ref 52 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
done
  • Cite Rap-Up as work/website on ref 53
done
  • Remove AOL from refs 54 and 67, citing MyDaily only as work/website
done
  • Remove wikilink on The Guardian for ref 55 and remove the bracketed part
done
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Idolator on ref 58 and remove BuzzMedia, as well as the staff since they are not an author
done
  • Solely cite MTV Networks as publisher on ref 61
done
  • Do the same for ref 66 but with no wikilink and removing MTV Buzzworthy
done
  • Remove the bracket part from refs 69 and 71
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 70 and remove the publisher
done
  • Cite Vevo as publisher on ref 74 with the wikilink
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Australian Recording Industry Association on refs 78 and 97
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billboard Brasil on ref 80
done
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 83 and remove the publisher
done
done
  • Fix
    MOS:CAPS
    issues with ref 99 and cite a work/publisher
done

Final comments and verdict

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