Talk:Tigris (roller coaster)

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 01:40, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( lists ): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism ): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have suitable captions ):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@Adog: Issues are comparatively minor copy changes, removing some roller coaster-y sentences, and then general improvements. 7-day hold. Ping when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:08, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

History

• Consider restructuring the first paragraph to split the "closure and demolition" part and the "permits for a new ride" part
• This sentence could stand to be reworded: In July 2018, documents were reported about upcoming developments where the previous attraction once stood in Busch Gardens Tampa Bay under the working title "Project TEEL".. Try The documents and permits, reported on in July, discussed upcoming developments on the site of the prior water ride under the working title "Project TEEL".
• When a {{convert}} is used as an adjective, set |adj=on
• Comma after "Sky Rocket II model" to balance the appositive
• "Tigris'" should be "Tigris's" per
  MOS:'S
  .
• By January 2019, the park had the roller coaster's supports three-fifths complete. Awkward wording, and this paragraph reads like a timeline with very similar sentence starts.
• The roller coaster's opening date was announced by the park on April 4, 2019, scheduled for mid-April. Find a way to integrate this with the following sentence.

• Done. Reconfigured paragraphs, wording, and grammar. Took edits into consideration. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Ride experience

• Reused, no hyphen
• tigers living conditions needs a possessive here, "tiger's living conditions"
• ...where it completes a non-inverting half-loop, a heartline roll before... Is a heartline roll a type of non-inverting half-loop? If so, add a comma after "roll". If not, this should be "half-loop and a heartline roll".

• Clarified and fixed. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Characteristics

• Use "gray" instead of "grey" (ENGVAR)
• Remove comma after "though"; excess "feet" in the same sentence after the convert template
• eighteen riders a train I'd use "riders per train"

• Fixed. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

• positives and negatives aspects fix by removing the end S from the first 2 words

• Done. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Source spot checks

I reviewed source [4] because I needed to check it for something and then randomly chose five more.

• [1] Checks out. Look at this ref to see how I handle multipage newspaper clippings. I added a clipping of page 1A.
• [4] Tampa Bay Business Journal: Confirms claims in all three uses.
• [6] Bay News 9: Confirms demolition began last month (June 2018).
• [8] Tampa Bay Business Journal: Confirms announcement, 2019 opening plans, and 2020 Gwazi plans
• [19] WTSP: Notes press event.
• [37] Orlando Sentinel: Could not verify because of a broken link.

• Fixed broken link. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Other

• Earwig mostly catches park attraction and section names.
• Archive references with
  WP:IABOT
  . (One is already dead.)
• Two freely licensed images and a fair-use logo, all appropriately tagged. All images, including the logo in the infobox, need
  alt text
  . Note that Infobox roller coaster did not support alt text for logos or images until I scouted this page out last night and discovered and fixed the omission, so this will be the first use of that infobox with any alt text. I encourage you to apply this to other pages you work with.

• Completed alt text and found out how to use the bot, thank you. Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:51, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Thank you for taking your time to review this article! Edits should be completed unless you have any other feedback. Again, I appreciate your time in reviewing! :) Adog (Talk・Cont) 19:54, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Adog: Just passed. I did make a few final tweaks and rewrote the logo alt text to be more descriptive. Think of it this way: if you had to describe the logo in detail on a telephone call or over the radio, how would you do it? Hopefully my example helps. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 20:40, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Yes that does help a lot. I was not too sure how detailed I should have gone, but that clarifies. :) Adog (Talk・Cont) 20:45, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]