Template:Did you know nominations/Alice Saxby

Source: Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia.
<
Template:Did you know nominations
The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 21:28, 30 March 2021 (UTC)

Alice Saxby

  • ... that nurse to British royalty, Alice Saxby, had the lowest curtsy that one colleague had ever seen?
    • ALT1:... that ...?

Created by Whispyhistory (talk) and Philafrenzy (talk). Nominated by Philafrenzy (talk) at 09:20, 28 February 2021 (UTC).

  • Comment. Not sure this is "hooky" enough for someone with such a prominate career. I sugest an alternative hook about this: "... that Alice Saxby was nurse in charge of an officer's wing at Botleys during the Second World War and cared for many of the first casualties from the Normandy landings." TJMSmith (talk) 05:05, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
  • This article is new enough and long enough. I'm happy with the original hook, the facts for which are cited inline, the article is neutral and I detected no copyright issues. The alternative hook is also acceptable. A QPQ has been done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:18, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

@Whispyhistory, Philafrenzy, and Cwmhiraeth: apologies for the late pulling of this as I was reviewing the queue set, and I hope I'm not being out of line here, but I agree with TJMSmith's comment above regarding the hookiness of this one. For a nurse with a seemingly storied career during the second world war, it seems odd to be focusing on how low her curtsy was. I suggest we go with a hook along the lines of the one mentioned by TJMSmith. Cheers  — Amakuru (talk) 11:18, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

Sure, I approved both hooks. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:30, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
It was just that there isn't much about what she did on that score in the article. I don't have the book. There is rather a lot about her deference to titled people and the hook is quite good I think, but I don't mind it being changed. Philafrenzy (talk) 11:43, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
The proposed Alt about Botleys isn't strong. Could @Whispyhistory: expand on Second World War activities in order to generate a better hook? We only have one sentence on that in the article at the moment. Philafrenzy (talk) 09:10, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
Expanded a bit as suggested. Whispyhistory (talk) 18:55, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
What about ALT2:... that matron
King Edward VII's Hospital for Officers, did not allow its elite medical staff to get above themselves? Philafrenzy (talk
) 23:11, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
Exactly what does "did not allow its elite medical staff to get above themselves" mean? The wording seems vague. 14:01, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

This article has been in the queue since February; ALT1 is an excellent hook. HouseOfChange (talk) 16:52, 30 March 2021 (UTC)

Made a minor tweak to it as the landings happened within a short period and she could only have dealt with a few of the many casualties. Philafrenzy (talk) 17:48, 30 March 2021 (UTC)