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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Bruxton (talk) 22:54, 13 May 2023 (UTC)

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Barclays Bank, Enfield

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Barclays Bank, Enfield, site of the first ATM
Barclays Bank, Enfield, site of the first ATM
  • ... that in 1967, the world's first ATM was installed at a branch of Barclays Bank in north London? Source: [1]
    • Reviewed: Francois Massaquoi
    • Comment: Still putting the final touches to it. Note: The ATM in the article is not the original.

Created by Philafrenzy (talk), Edwardx (talk), Whispyhistory (talk), and No Swan So Fine (talk). Nominated by Philafrenzy (talk) at 08:21, 16 April 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Barclays Bank, Enfield; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.

Should be able to finish it in the next couple of days, or sooner. Thanks. Philafrenzy (talk) 20:45, 18 April 2023 (UTC)
Well, I'll start the review now (I have a bit of time), and go over it again when you're properly done.
The article was created on 10 April, so was new enough when the DYK nom was submitted, it is plenty long enough, it is neutrally written, and is free of any copyvio I can detect. Almost every assertion is supported by an inline citation to a reliable source, except for a couple about its location on the street which you have tagged as needing a citation - I assume that will be addressed in your finishing off?
The hook is interesting, and is supported by the citation offered in the nomination.
QPQ has been done, and the image is appropriately licensed.
A couple of suggestions:
  • I think that it would be possible to expand the lead slightly, and include the hook fact in the lead.
  • I find the following sentence a bit confusing: According to its staff, the Enfield branch was easily granted permission, had a "good pavement facade, sufficiently high windows" and was near enough to London, to be chosen rather than a big city. Granted permission for what, and from whom? Are we talking about planning permission here, or just getting selected to be the first bank to receive one of the machines?
All in all, this will be good to go when the missing citations are added; my suggestions above are just that, I don't need them to be addressed for this to pass. Girth Summit (blether) 14:59, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
Expanded the lead and made a few other changes. I don't think citations are actually needed for facts easily seen on any map. Expanded the image caption. Philafrenzy (talk) 21:39, 22 April 2023 (UTC)
Girth Summit, pinging in case you hadn't seen that the article edits were completed on April 22 and this is presumably ready for a final review. Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 18:36, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
Thanks for the ping BlueMoonset - should have looked back earlier, this is now good to go. Girth Summit (blether) 07:56, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
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