User talk:Ivy.bergstrom/sandbox

@Ivy.bergstrom and Hillskay: Nice work on your draft. I made a few copy edits to format your sections headers properly, fix the capitalization and removed extra whitespace. This is all per Wikipedia's [[WP:MOS|style guidelines].

A few formatting things that still need to be done

• References go after punctuation, not before. Currently your use is inconsistent.
• Use "and" instead of "&" unless it's specifically part of a quote.
• Only capitalize proper nouns. "Biospychosocial", for example, should not be capitalized.
• In the history section, you have copied over some tags that say "non primary source needed". You should fix this by adding a secondary source.

Some other questions

• There seems to be a fair amount of content in the existing biopsychosocial model article that you didn't transfer over. Make sure that you have a good reason for deleting this and be prepared to defend it if another editor questions that decision.
• The first paragraph of the "Potential applications" section has no sources. The last sentence of the second paragraph in that section also has no sources. Make sure that everything is sourced.
• In the "Criticisms and achievements" section, you say Benning has claimed.... Who is Benning (ideally "[description of what he is] Tony Benning..."). Also try to find a word other than "claimed". Claimed is a
  "word to avoid"
  on Wikipedia, because it's often interpreted as a subtle (or unsubtle) was of casting doubt on a source.

Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:01, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]