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First Lord of the Treasury

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I'm aiming for

• You need to show the source for each statement in the article, through
  inline citations
  .
• The dates in the table no longer
  need to be linked.
• The article doesn't really say what the First Lord did, before the position became a sinecure.
• The article is quite short; so are
  Lord of the Treasury
  .
• The link for commission in the first sentence goes to Government agency, which is not really the meaning intended here; I would just drop the link as it is explained in the first paragraph of the body.
• Lords Commissioners of the Treasury, First Lord of the Treasury and Chancellor of the Exchequer don't need to be bolded in the Lords of the Treasury section.
• It might perhaps be instructive to mention that the office of Lord High Admiral was similarly exercised by a commission.
• The term ministry should be defined.
• The footnotes should be in a separate section to the references. Also, the two books currently quoted as sources are missing information such as publisher, location, date etc.

Hope this helps. Dr pda (talk) 05:45, 25 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]