User contributions for 98.216.245.29

24 February 2018

• 09:0909:09, 24 February 2018 diff hist −3‎ Stephen Fry ‎ Fixed my typo from before.
• 09:0809:08, 24 February 2018 diff hist −18‎ Stephen Fry ‎ Undid revision 827366740 by Bastun (talk) Unexplained revert.
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• 08:1708:17, 24 February 2018 diff hist −18‎ Stephen Fry ‎ "perhaps" = unencyclopedic dreamy speculation, "best known" is uncited and uncitable, usually "best known" only in the original editor's mind and only then at only one point in time. To me, he's "best known" for having prostate cancer!

23 February 2018

• 19:3619:36, 23 February 2018 diff hist −200‎ Powwow ‎ Not summarized from material in text. Uncited, overly general conclusion from the previously-removed weak ref. Cross-pollination of language *might* be a suitable main text section if it's careful to avoid POV, and if it's well-referenced.
• 19:1119:11, 23 February 2018 diff hist −393‎ Powwow ‎ Overstated, opinion. Ref doesn't support that. Tag: references removed

21 February 2018

• 17:2617:26, 21 February 2018 diff hist −6‎ Björn Ironside ‎ Undid revision 826907598 by 98.216.245.29 (talk) I changed my mind. Having just learned the word myself, I now think it's a cool word and worth helping others to know it! :-) .
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• 17:2117:21, 21 February 2018 diff hist +6‎ Björn Ironside ‎ "Barrow" is an obscure term (in the US at least), it might not be colloquial enough. It's clear that it doesn't mean "grave" in the modern sense, so that was a good fix. I tried "burial mound" from the linked article.
• 17:1017:10, 21 February 2018 diff hist −45‎ Eliot Spitzer prostitution scandal ‎ "Reportedly" is usually an indicator of
  journalistic
  style (vs. encyclopedic style), which is a medium sin. If source itself says "reportedly", it might not meet reliability standards.
• 08:0208:02, 21 February 2018 diff hist −72‎ Björn Ironside ‎ Language lessons are off topic, especially in lede. It's digression here too.
• 01:1901:19, 21 February 2018 diff hist +4‎ Chip Monck ‎ →‎Woodstock: missing "the"
• 01:1801:18, 21 February 2018 diff hist 0‎ Chip Monck ‎ "did" was ambiguous. I presume he "lit" those concerts.

20 February 2018

• 22:0122:01, 20 February 2018 diff hist −20‎ Eve Arden ‎ Reworded so it doesn't look as much like off-topic digression unsuited for lede.
• 19:4719:47, 20 February 2018 diff hist +106‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Eye Candy
• 19:2919:29, 20 February 2018 diff hist +732‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Eye Candy
• 19:1619:16, 20 February 2018 diff hist +657‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Eye Candy
• 19:0019:00, 20 February 2018 diff hist −21‎ Fort William Henry ‎ →‎Replica: Calling a movie by one of its actors is suited for popular writing, but is unencyclopedic (movie-fan slang, etc.). Here it's also off topic.
• 18:2318:23, 20 February 2018 diff hist −40‎ Fort William Henry ‎ Split long sentence, removed unnecessary (and uncitable) "best known". Removed digressive/off-topic (for lede) publication date
• 18:1018:10, 20 February 2018 diff hist +24‎ Leatherstocking Tales ‎ →‎Characters: A little more clarity as to what was being said.
• 18:0318:03, 20 February 2018 diff hist −1‎ Leatherstocking Tales ‎ →‎Characters: "an" --> "a"
• 08:2608:26, 20 February 2018 diff hist −8‎ Obstetrical forceps ‎ →‎Historical role in the medicalization of childbirth: more encyclopedic wording
• 08:1608:16, 20 February 2018 diff hist +2‎ Obstetrical forceps ‎ →‎History: tense
• 08:1008:10, 20 February 2018 diff hist −46‎ Obstetrical forceps ‎ →‎Anglo-American types: link was to a large general article about childbirth that only mentioned "molding" once, and didn't add any more explanation than was given already
• 06:1306:13, 20 February 2018 diff hist +62‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Horrible so-called "article".
• 06:1006:10, 20 February 2018 diff hist +426‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Horrible so-called "article".
• 05:4505:45, 20 February 2018 diff hist +868‎ Talk:Attractiveness ‎ →‎Horrible so-called "article".: new section
• 05:2905:29, 20 February 2018 diff hist +39‎ Fluxbox ‎ Removed slang. The link it pointed to actually does call it slang.
• 05:2505:25, 20 February 2018 diff hist −1‎ Attractiveness ‎ Undid revision 826630900 by
  talk
  ) Also a dummy edit.... Thanks! :-) .
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• 05:2205:22, 20 February 2018 diff hist +7‎ Play-Doh ‎ fixed
  WP:journal
  style, split two-subject sentence.
• 05:0305:03, 20 February 2018 diff hist −4,451‎ Attractiveness ‎ removed off topic POV personal essay

18 February 2018

• 20:0720:07, 18 February 2018 diff hist +25‎ Natty Bumppo ‎ "fictional" is a central pertinent fact and should be mentioned up front (in lede). Otherwise, you gotta figure it out by reading down-text.
• 20:0120:01, 18 February 2018 diff hist −231‎ Natty Bumppo ‎ Uncited made-up research about a made-up character.
  WP:OR
• 18:5718:57, 18 February 2018 diff hist +20‎ Erie Canal ‎ Same. (fixed more
  WP:journal
  , split sentence)
• 18:5518:55, 18 February 2018 diff hist +13‎ Erie Canal ‎ Simplified fancy "differential", source doesn't say it. Clarified the very clever and fancy "bookended". Split that sentence too.
• 18:4718:47, 18 February 2018 diff hist +6‎ Erie Canal ‎ Same backwards-talking
  journalistic
  run-on generating style resulted in a single-sentence paragraph. Simplified, straightforward-ized
• 18:3818:38, 18 February 2018 diff hist +15‎ Erie Canal ‎ Revised backwards-talking journalistic style that tries to cram multiple subjects into one run-on sentence. Split run-on.
• 18:2618:26, 18 February 2018 diff hist −116‎ Mohawk River ‎ →‎River modifications: removed digression
• 16:0316:03, 18 February 2018 diff hist −2‎ The Last of the Mohicans (1992 film) ‎ By stating directly here ("film" vs. "latter"), reader doesn't have to scan back to see what "latter" was, especially if (he) had only quickly scanned the first part of the sentence.
• 15:5915:59, 18 February 2018 diff hist +40‎ The Last of the Mohicans (1992 film) ‎ Direct statement of the very pertinent name instead of relying on a link and the somewhat obscure word "eponymous".
• 09:3509:35, 18 February 2018 diff hist −125‎ Cohoes, New York ‎ →‎History: Uncited. Flowery metaphor ("on which the future was built"), slight editorializing ("slave economy").
• 07:5007:50, 18 February 2018 diff hist −31‎ Mohawk River ‎ "Capital District" is a broad area, not fitting to describe the location of the Mohawk river "delta".

17 February 2018

• 16:1816:18, 17 February 2018 diff hist −317‎ Laura Main ‎ →‎Career: Removed future predictions (also somewhat promotional)
• 16:0116:01, 17 February 2018 diff hist −24‎ Helen George ‎ What other people know is off topic, also uncited here. Purpose of "BNF" expression is to trigger a memory connection in the reader, but "BNF" is an unencyclopedic way to do that. Just leaving it out still works! :-) .
• 06:4106:41, 17 February 2018 diff hist −96‎ Ballston, New York ‎ Undid revision 826072828 by Peter Flass (talk) Need better cite and better non-weasel wording to reinstate. Ref itself is vague and weasel worded, unreliable to support that wording.
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16 February 2018

• 23:2223:22, 16 February 2018 diff hist −96‎ Ballston, New York ‎
  WP:fringe
  . Retained ref for "artifact".
• 23:1023:10, 16 February 2018 diff hist −45‎ Ballston, New York ‎ →‎History: ref doesn't say this
• 23:0923:09, 16 February 2018 diff hist −224‎ Ballston, New York ‎ →‎History: A meetup posting is not a reliable ref. Tag: references removed
• 23:0823:08, 16 February 2018 diff hist 0‎ Ballston, New York ‎ →‎History: spelling

14 February 2018

• 17:1517:15, 14 February 2018 diff hist +1‎ Life (magazine) ‎ Doh! It referred to Henry Luce (I just figured that out). Still, it's just as clear (more clear) without "The Luce". (null edit)
• 17:0417:04, 14 February 2018 diff hist −8‎ Life (magazine) ‎ Dreamy speculative "perhaps" is unencyclopedic.
• 17:0217:02, 14 February 2018 diff hist −9‎ Life (magazine) ‎ "Luce" seems to be not related to magazines, but to restaurants maybe? Couldn't tell. lt might be industry jargon, but I searched and couldn't find it, and
  WP:jargon
  is to be avoided anyway (esp. very obscure jargon like this is -- if it is jargon).