Talk:2020 Seattle Sounders FC season

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 23:43, 13 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( lists ): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism ): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have suitable captions ):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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It's mostly comma management and a few missing words. All spot checks came back clean (about the only thing lacking was that Inter Miami's 5th expansion draft pick was the 9th overall). Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:20, 14 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copy changes

• At the start of training camp in early January, the Sounders had 21 signed first-team players and were still engaged in talks with several others, but lacked replacements in several positions. Fix this CinS issue by adding "they" after "but".
  • Fixed.
• "Juan Calderon" probably is "Juan Calderón" with accented O.
  • Fixed; it seems the MLS match report didn't have the accented O.
• The Sounders conceded early in the second leg but goals Comma after leg (CinS)
  • Fixed.
• the Sounders were not expected to FC Cincinnati missing word "play"
  • Fixed.
• Each player was assigned their own room and each team was given an entire hotel floor Needs a comma after "room" (CinS)
  • Fixed.
• The Sounders played through the tournament without midfielder João Paulo due to a quad injury, but saw the return of captain Nicolás Lodeiro Remove comma (CinS)
  • Fixed.
• would not awarded missing a "be"
  • Fixed by rewriting the sentence.
• The Sounders were then scheduled to play away to the LA Galaxy, but the team's players refused to play and forced it to be postponed. Which team?
  • Rewrote the sentences.
• The final two matches of September were played on the road and both required same-day flights to Portland and Los Angeles. No need for "both"
  • Fixed.
• against the Vancouver Whitecaps FC no "the" to be consistent
  • Fixed.
• The Sounders then traveled to play the Colorado Rapids on November 1 in the Denver area, their longest away trip of the season. and lost 3–1, The period should be a comma.
  • Separated sentences.
• who they played should be "whom"
  • Rewrote the sentence; not sure that "whom" would be correct to use here.
• The Sounders then hosted the Western Conference final on December 8 against fourth-seeded Minnesota United FC, who had defeated top-seeded Kansas City in an upset victory four days earlier. This sentence should be in the next paragraph.
  • Rebalanced the paragraphs in the section.
• after the start of 2020 MLS SuperDraft missing a "the"
  • Fixed.
• Clasura is misspelled: it is Clausura with two Us
  • Fixed.
• During the offseason, Schmetzer signed a multi-year contract extension to remain as head coach while sporting Comma after "coach"
  • Fixed.
• Jordan Morris was loaned for six months to Welsh side Swansea City AFC in the EFL Championship, but only played five matches before he suffered his second career anterior cruciate ligament injury in February 2021. Resolve the CinS by adding "he" after "but"
  • Fixed.
• The Sounders began the 2021 season with a 13-match unbeaten run and finished second in the Western Conference, but were eliminated Remove comma (CinS)
  • Fixed.

Spot checks

• 13: Seattle Times article on Roldán moving to right back after option first declined. Y
• 14: The Sounders are innovators when it comes to support staff and they beefed up that aspect of their team this season. Former S2 assistant coach John Hutchinson is in a new role as first team development coach. Henry Brauner, a former recruitment head for the academy, is now director of player development. Y
• 15: Mention of snow; forward Jordan Morris and midfielder Cristian Roldan are training with the U.S. men’s national team. Y
• 21: later this week in Mexico City for the final round of preseason training before opening CONCACAF Champions League play Y
• 33: ProPublica article. This is a fascinating read but quite a sidebar. You could probably justify a sentence about how Dow Constantine wanted to shut down large gatherings the day before but this went ahead. Y
• 38: A second MLS game has been affected by the coronvavirus outbreak with the reigning league champion Seattle Sounders announcing Wednesday that their March 21 home game with FC Dallas has been postponed. The decision came shortly after Washington Gov. Jay Inslee declared the state would prohibit gatherings of more than 250 people in three Seattle-area counties. Y
• 81: 7–1 win; hazy conditions. Y
• 82: AP report: Seattle scored five goals faster than any team in MLS history, needing just 33 minutes to take a 5-0 lead on the hapless Earthquakes. The five goals in a half set a franchise record and Seattle tied the league record for most goals in a first half, joining Chicago in 2019 against Atlanta United and FC Dallas in 2017 against Real Salt Lake. The Sounders added two more in the second half, becoming the ninth team in league history to score at least seven goals in a match. Y
• 106: ...last year’s Conference Final victory by the same scoreline Y
• 107: ...When the league resumed, it used short travel times to determine matchups. The farthest east the Sounders traveled was Colorado. Add a cite invoke to [100] as the scoreline is not in [107]. Y
  • Fixed.
• 115: The first goal came in the 25th minute: a driven cross from the right by Harrison Afful, and a powerful one-timed finish at the back post by Lucas Zelarayán, an Argentine midfielder signed out of Mexico’s top league last winter, and — despite his diminutive size — a menacing presence throughout the first half.
  Six minutes later, it was 2-0, after Zelarayán fed an open Derrick Etienne Jr. — Santos’s replacement in the starting lineup — on the left side of the penalty area. Slipping behind his defender, Etienne coolly curled a right-footed shot around Seattle goalkeeper Stefan Frei. ... Zelarayán’s second goal, Columbus’s third, in the 82nd minute removed all doubt. Checks out. Y
• 122: U.S. Open Cup format information. Y
• 143: Transfer window dates for 2020 pre-COVID. Y
• 148: Free transfer of Shane O'Neill. Y
• 158: Expansion draft results: 5. Bryan Meredith, Goalkeeper — Age: 30 — Drafted from Seattle Sounders That's fifth for Inter Miami. With them winning the coin flip, did they pick 1/3/5/7/9? If they did, Y
  • Miami did pick first and only on odds.
• 167: Ruidíaz, MLS Player of the Week, Week 6 Y
• 170: Week 1 Team of the Week with Morris Y
• 179: Week 21 Team of the Week with Ruidíaz Y
• 189: 2021 Leagues Cup final report. Y

Earwig catches some really banal phrases like "and the CONCACAF Champions League" and "a match against the Vancouver Whitecaps".

Images

There is the team wordmark (below TOO) and several CC-licensed images. Encouragement: Add alt text (likely "refer to caption").

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for the review. I've made most of the changes suggested and will also add ALT text in the next few days. SounderBruce 01:12, 15 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]