Talk:Hunter Mariners

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• I would suggest saying in the first sentence, that they were an Austrlian team. Either "were an Australian rugby league team" or "based in ... Newcastle, Australia".
  •  Done  The Windler talk  08:58, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• Second, third and fourth sentences all start "The club" I would suggest changing at least one.
  •  Done  The Windler talk  08:58, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• I'd suggest adding even just one line to explain why they disbanded in the lead. It's a vital part of the club's history.
  •  Done I think. Last sentence of the 2nd lead paragraph.  The Windler talk  08:58, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

History

• "The New South Wales Rugby League competition (NSWRL) had been formed in 1908 and there was a Newcastle based club in the first two seasons, but eventually left to form their own Newcastle Rugby League." Run-on sentence. I suggest splitting after 1908. It also needs "they" after but.
  •  Done  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "It was then that News Limited began proposing and deliberating a rival rugby league competition and by the end of the year the current twenty teams which competed in the ARL were split between the Super League and ARL competitions." What does current refer to. I would seriously suggest re-writing this to put a specific time frame on it. See
  WP:DATE
  for more details about the use of current.
  •  Done  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "aligned itself with the ARL and the new competition Super League was left without a Newcastle based team." new competition Super League is worded the wrong way round I think.
  •  Done  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "members of the Leagues Club" incorrect use of possessive. It needs an apostrophe somewhere, but I'm not sure where, because I'm not entirely sure what you're referring to.
  •  Not done, I'm not entirely good at English. It is referring to members of a club, people of that club.  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
• "In early 1996, the Hunter Mariners club was officially launched, without a home ground," When did they find a ground - it doesn't say anywhere. Where was the ground?
  •  Done  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Do you have any images?

• • I doubt there are any, or I don't know of any "free" images. Theres already a non-free image used, so I'm unsure whether if they need images or not.  The Windler talk  09:35, 12 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

A couple of things to do, so I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 13:57, 11 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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