Talk:IBM PS/2 Model 30

Moved to mainspace by DigitalIceAge (talk). Self-nominated at 17:51, 27 April 2022 (UTC).[reply]

• Full review to follow, but right now I have some concerns about the hooks. Both hooks seem technical and may not easily be understandable or appealing to laypeople. Could different, less technical hooks be proposed here? I think a hook or two about its sales (or lack thereof) may be more promising. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 04:06, 5 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Hi @Narutolovehinata5: I plan on expanding the article with a reception section today which should bear some interesting hooks. Sorry for the silence, I've had a busy schedule combined with a bit of writers block recently. Thanks for reviewing! DigitalIceAge (talk) 22:08, 5 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I am looking forward to that. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 23:41, 5 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

• ALT2: ... that IBM included a disk-caching utility on their PS/2 Model 30's included floppy disk to help combat the slowness of its hard drive? Source: PC Magazine
• ALT3: ... that
  display standard for their PS/2 Model 30 personal computer? Source: PC Magazine
• ALT4: ... that a reviewer praised IBM for merging the AT power connectors for their PS/2 Model 30 personal computer which otherwise could "be inadvertently and disastrously switched"? Source: PC Magazine

@Narutolovehinata5: DigitalIceAge (talk) 05:47, 8 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll give this some thought. As someone familiar with tech I think ALT2 might be more interesting, but it may still be too technical for a layperson audience. ALT4 is less interesting to me but may be slightly easier to understand. I'll try to do the full review by tomorrow. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 13:53, 8 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

QPQ now done. Thanks again for the review! DigitalIceAge (talk) 20:51, 8 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

• Article meets DYK requirements and a QPQ has been done. No close paraphrasing was found either. All the hooks are cited inline and verified. I can't decide as to whether ALT2 or ALT4 are the best options here so I'm leaving the final decision to the promoter. All other hooks (ALT0, ALT1, and ALT3) are rejected for being too technical for a broad audience. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 02:44, 10 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Narutolovehinata5: ALT0 was pretty grabby to me; how would you feel about a pared-down version?
  • ALT0a: ... that the stock hard drive of IBM's Personal System/2 Model 30 (pictured) was twice as slow as its predecessor? — Preceding unsigned comment added by theleekycauldron (talk • contribs)
  • Reping to Narutolovehinata5 because i didn't sign it theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 21:59, 20 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
    • I think ALT0a's wording is much better than the original, so much so that I think I prefer it over ALT4. Let's go with that then. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 00:12, 21 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]