Talk:I Turn My Camera On

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A fact from I Turn My Camera On appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 12 September 2019 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows: Did you know... that Spoon frontman Britt Daniel was inspired by Franz Ferdinand's 2004 song "Take Me Out" while writing "I Turn My Camera On", and was influenced by Prince to sing it with falsetto vocals? A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2019/September. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/I Turn My Camera On.

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 16:01, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Sources

• Amazon is used a few times for CD spec, release dates, etc - is there no better source for this?
  • There is a page for the vinyl single on 45cat, which can be used as the source for the track listing, as well as on AllMusic, which can be used as a source for the release date. Would this be better?
    • @Aria1561: Those would be great. Kingsif (talk) 17:51, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
      • @Kingsif:  Done Aria1561 (talk) 18:11, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
• Other sources look good, used appropriately, I can't see OR
• Everything has inline citation except a quote in the lead and composition section, where refs should be added (looks like Hilton, Robin (December 8, 2015). "Spoon's Britt Daniel Explains How He Made 'Gimme Fiction,' Track By Track". NPR Music. Retrieved August 15, 2019 in both cases)
  •  Done

Illustration

• Fair use cover in infobox, short song clip used well
• Free, licensed, image of Britt Daniel that's relevant
• Infobox and tables suitable, good use of split columns in personnel

Prose

• Lead might be a little long for the article
  • The composition info in the second paragraph might be too detailed, this part could be cut back
  •  Done, somewhat — I took a little out, though I feel what I left is a sufficient amount of information about the song to have in the lead.
• Background section good
• I feel like the Composition section is a bit upside down - surely it should talk about the meaning and how Daniel wrote it before saying who recorded what parts? Is all of the personnel info needed in this section anyway?
  •  Done — Would just like to note that I started the section off originally with information about the music first because, to my knowledge, Britt Daniel began writing the music before the lyrics, so I felt it was appropriate to start that way. I took out the technical personnel aspects from the Composition section, though I felt the bits about who produced the song along with Britt Daniel and Jim Eno's instrumental contributions were important enough to keep.
• The sentences at the end of the Release section (It was also used in a commercial for car manufacturer Jaguar.[22] The song was also used in a viral video featuring the miniature research robot Keepon, in which the robot dances to the song. The video has garnered millions of views on YouTube since its release) could be consolidated to read better, e.g. "...Jaguar, and in a viral video... the song. The Keepon video..."
  •  Done
• Reception is good

Overall

• A few concerns, but not much. Nice article. Kingsif (talk) 16:20, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Kingsif: Thanks for reviewing the article! I have made some changes in accordance with your review. Aria1561 (talk) 17:45, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
    • @Aria1561: Nice work! Kingsif (talk) 18:13, 30 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I was taking some pictures and then can’t find the camera now 2601:647:4B01:44E0:548:47FD:EB9C:C5A0 (talk) 14:53, 24 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]