Talk:Nyuserre Ini

	Nyuserre Ini is a featured article; it (or a previous version of it) has been identified as one of the best articles produced by the Wikipedia community. Even so, if you can update or improve it, please do so.
	This article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page as Today's featured article on August 12, 2020.
Article milestones Date Process Result January 4, 2017 Good article nominee Listed February 21, 2017 Featured article candidate Promoted
Current status: Featured article

This  level-5 vital article is rated FA-class on Wikipedia's content assessment scale. It is of interest to the following WikiProjects:

Ancient Egypt Low‑importance This article is within the scope of WikiProject Ancient Egypt, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Egyptological subjects on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Ancient EgyptWikipedia:WikiProject Ancient EgyptTemplate:WikiProject Ancient EgyptAncient Egypt articles Low This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale. WikiProject Ancient Egypt to-do list: edit history watch purge Needed articles. We should have an article on every pyramid and every nome in Ancient Egypt. I'm sure the rest of us can think of other articles we should have. Cleanup. To start with, most of the general history articles badly need attention. And I'm told that at least some of the dynasty articles need work. Any other candidates? Standardize the Chronology. A boring task, but the benefit of doing it is that you can set the dates !(e.g., why say Khufu lived 2589-2566? As long as you keep the length of his reign correct, or cite a respected source, you can date it 2590-2567 or 2585-2563) Stub sorting Anyone? I consider this probably the most unimportant of tasks on Wikipedia, but if you believe it needs to be done . . . Data sorting. This is a project I'd like to take on some day, & could be applied to more of Wikipedia than just Ancient Egypt. Take one of the standard authorities of history or culture -- Herotodus, the Elder Pliny, the writings of Breasted or Kenneth Kitchen, & see if you can't smoothly merge quotations or information into relevant articles. Probably a good exercise for someone who owns one of those impressive texts, yet can't get access to a research library. Biography: Royalty and Nobility This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to join the project and contribute to the discussion. For instructions on how to use this banner, please refer to the documentation.BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Biographybiography articles This article is supported by WikiProject Royalty and Nobility (assessed as Low-importance).

This review is

transcluded from Talk:Nyuserre Ini/GA1

. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 16:14, 3 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be happy to give this a review. JAGUAR  16:14, 3 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, that's great, I am looking forward to your comments! Iry-Hor (talk) 16:22, 3 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

Lead

• I note that this article is in American English, so I'll keep that in mind and will look out for any inconsistencies!
• "a move which may have been an attempt to legitimate his rule" - shouldn't this be legitimize?

You are right, I corrected it. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "In Nyuserre's case however, this official, that is state-sponsored cult, existed for very long" - reads a tad awkward, how about In Nyuserre's case however, this official—albiet state-sponsored cult—existed for very long. I'm not so sure about this, so feel free to change or ignore

I wrote "In Nyuserre's case however, this official state-sponsored cult, existed for very long". I felt like "albeit" would give a sense of opposite between official and state-sponsored, when these are actually synonymous in this context. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "seems to have continued until the New Kingdom period" - link New Kingdom of Egypt

Done! Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• The lead summarises the article in accordance to
  WP:LEAD
  , so no issues there

Body

• "dying unexpectedly after a very short reign of about 2 years" - two years

Done! Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "scholars such as Nigel Strudwick traditionally credited Nyuserre with 11 years of reign" - 11 years (I usually write out smaller numbers in prose, but I don't know if '11' or '12' is the limit)

I propose to keep 11 and 12 as numbers, notably because the article invariably refers to the "12th Dynasty", which is easier to read than "Twelfth Dynasty" I think. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "showing him participating in a Sed festival" - is 'Sed' meant to be italicised? I noticed that it is italicised in the header ("Nyuserre's Sed festival"). The Sed festival article doesn't use italics

I use the convention that Ancient Egyptian words are italicised in my articles, following a past FA review (I think it was for Unas). The word Sed is Ancient Egyptian, being the original name of the festival, hence I italicised it. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• " Mere depictions of the festival do not necessarily imply a long reign however, [note 9]" - extra space before the note

Fixed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "and that "the sed-festival scenes from Abu Gurab [most probably reflect] the 30th jubilee of the king's accession to the throne"[17]" - missing full stop

Fixed! Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Interestingly, the reliefs of Nyuserre Sed festival" - Nyuserre's Sed festival

Fixed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "To the extreme south of Egypt, in Lower Nubia" - is 'lower' meant to be capitalised here?

Yes I think it is correct since the geographical locality is called "Lower Nubia". Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• " to the west or the Sinai and Palestine to the East during his reign" - not sure why east is capitalised

Me neither! Fixed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• Sun Temple of Nyuserre Ini is a red link, so it might be worth getting rid of it

Ok. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Remarkably, on this relief both Khentkaus and Nyuserre appear on the same scale" - sounds a tad informal

Removed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "Taken together these seals reveal that, at the very least, Menkauhor and Djedkare did not perceive Nyuserre as an antagonist." - needs a citation

Ok I see I forgot to put them, fixed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• "manifested by the dedication of statues and the compilation of lists of kings to be honoured" - this too, needs a citation. And also honored, to stay consistent with American English

Fixed. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• The ref link Abusir and Saqqara in the Year 2000 is dead (I think)

Indeed, I removed the link as I cannot find a live link for the document. I have the pdf of the source though. Iry-Hor (talk) 17:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This is a truly excellent article! It is well written, comprehensive, and all of the sources check out. These are minor prose nitpicks, so I'll be happy to promote this once all are clarified. It was also enjoyable to read. JAGUAR  16:11, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Jaguar I am glad you liked it! Iry-Hor (talk) 17:34, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them! This is good to go now. Good luck with FAC, if you intend to nominate this! JAGUAR  19:32, 4 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

JaguarYes I will put it up at FAC soon, I will let you know so you can post comments there if you wish to. Iry-Hor (talk) 09:13, 5 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hello fellow Wikipedians,

I have just modified 6 external links on Nyuserre Ini. Please take a moment to review my edit. If you have any questions, or need the bot to ignore the links, or the page altogether, please visit this simple FaQ for additional information. I made the following changes:

• Corrected formatting/usage for http://www.ifao.egnet.net/bifao/Bifao095_art_03.pdf
• Added archive https://web.archive.org/web/20150402105848/http://www.gizapyramids.org/pdf_library/baud_famille_2.pdf to http://www.gizapyramids.org/pdf_library/baud_famille_2.pdf
• Corrected formatting/usage for http://egyptologie.ff.cuni.cz/pdf/AS%202000_mensi.pdf
• Corrected formatting/usage for http://egyptologie.ff.cuni.cz/pdf/Forgotten%20Pharaohs%2C%20Lost%20Pyramids.pdf
• Corrected formatting/usage for http://egyptologie.ff.cuni.cz/pdf/AS%202000_mensi.pdf
• Corrected formatting/usage for http://www.archaeogate.org/egittologia/article/657/8/nuove-scoperte-archeologiche-nellarea-delle-piramidi-di.html

When you have finished reviewing my changes, you may follow the instructions on the template below to fix any issues with the URLs.

This message was posted before February 2018.

• If you have discovered URLs which were erroneously considered dead by the bot, you can report them with this tool.
• If you found an error with any archives or the URLs themselves, you can fix them with this tool.

Cheers.—InternetArchiveBot (Report bug) 18:14, 19 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]