Talk:Revolutionary Action Movement

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- I would suggest changing the word "presaged," since it can seem to carry a negative meaning. Perhaps use "foreshadowed" or "foretold" instead, or even just more broadly "influenced."
- "Essentially" feels awkward to me in your second sentence under "Group Formation." Maybe "largely" instead?
- "At the request of Donald Freeman, who was enrolled at Case Western Reserve University at the time, Challenge became inspired by the words of Harold Cruse and shifted its focus from educating their audience to creating a mass black working-class nationalist movement in the North" - Confusing phrasing. "Request" and "inspired by" send a confusing message, because the former implies that one individual guided Challenge towards Cruse, whereas the latter implies that the group as a whole was influenced by Cruse.
- Max Stanford - when you say "now," do you mean at the time of his participation in RAM? If so, make that clearer. I would also say if you have information on how the Nation of Islam influenced his politics, you should include it.

LEADERSHIP
- Under leadership, will you be elaborating on Wanda Marshall?
STRUCTURE
- What do you mean by "semi-clandestine"? In what ways were the public/private?
IDEOLOGY
- I would suggest linking "black nationalism" and "Third World internatlonalism" to pages on Wikipedia that explain more about them - When you say, "Revolutionary nationalists believed that colonized peoples around the world must rise up and destroy the "universal slavemaster,"" are you specifically talking about those assoc. with RAM?
DISSOLUTION - Can you elaborate on why they fall apart?
CRITICISMS OF RAM
- In the last section that you write about, it is unclear who you are talking about or what organizations.
Let me know if you have any questions about any of this! --- Byzhou1 (talk) 06:39, 2 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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