Talk:She Bangs/GA2

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 15:22, 5 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Good Article
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3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4.
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I will review this since it is the oldest unreviewed songs GAN and I was the reviewer the first time; I do regret somewhat how specific I was during GA reviews back then. --K. Peake 15:22, 5 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

  • Why is "Amor" listed before "Por Arriba, Por Abajo" under B-sides in the infobox when the track listing has the opposite order?
  • "The song is a dance track, with Latin music influences, while the lyrics" → "A dance track with Latin music influences, its lyrics" but should salsa be mentioned here too?
  • "a woman and is" → "a woman, and the song is"
  • "It received widely positive reviews" → "The song received widely positive reviews"
  • The word Grammy is not needed before nomination when the awards show is mentioned that same sentence
  • "The song was" → "The former was" to avoid confusion with "Livin' la Vida Loca"
  • "United Kingdom, and" → "the United Kingdom, and"
  • "was also recorded under" → "was recorded under"
  • It needs to be sourced directly in the body that the Spanish language version was the one that charted on the Hot Latin Songs chart, as the article itself says of the song's era "Songs on the chart were not necessarily in Spanish language"
  • You should mention at least one of the live performances directly before the video info, plus use "the original version" here
  • "for "She Bangs" was" → "for the song was"
  • "by several artists including" → "by several artists, including"
  • Mention what year he covered the song

Background and release

  • "In 1999 and 2000," → "From 1999 to 2000,"
  • "fifth tour, Livin' la Vida Loca Tour to further promote" → "fifth tour the Livin' la Vida Loca Tour to promote"
  • "for his sixth studio album Sound Loaded." → "for Sound Loaded."
  • "name in an article" → "name as "She Bangs" in an article"
  • Pipe Spanish to Spanish language
  • "up in his career," and" → "up in his career", and" per
    MOS:QUOTE
  • "that there are possibilities that Martin might perform" → "the possibilities of Martin performing"
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
  • Change MTV channel to MTV
  • "Also Martin's publicist" → "Also, Martin's publicist"
  • "the music video was already shot" → "the song's music video had already been shot"
  • Remove wikilink on Bahamas
  • Mention the writers and producers here, as everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body
  • "Then it was released" → "Thereafter, the song was released" and shouldn't you be more specific than the markets, while following [6] still?
  • "It was included as the first track on" → ""She Bangs" was included as the first track on Martin's sixth studio album Sound Loaded"

Composition and lyrics

Critical reception

  • Why is radio piped to airplay here instead of on its first mention in the opening section of the body?
  • "Also Taylor Mims from Billboard described" → "Also from Billboard, Taylor Mims described" but no ref is invoked for this review
  • Pipe pop to Pop music
  • "the song "glamorous"" → "the song "clamorous"" per the source
  • "opining that the "life" → "opining the "life"
  • Wikilink music video
  • Remove previous lead single introduction because we already know about "Livin' la Vida Loca"
  • "Orlando Sentinel's Jim Abbott" → "the Orlando Sentinel's Jim Abbott"
  • ""bon-bon shakers"" → ""'bon-bon' shakers"." per the source and add a pipe to the song article instead, as the reference is not directly mentioning but it seems they alluding to it
  • The third greatest hit ranking can be kept but remove the quote from the background of the list per
    WP:UNDUE

Accolades

  • "concluded by calling the song" → "called the song" because this is the start of his opinion piece

Commercial performance

  • "It spend 6 weeks" → "It spent 6 weeks"
  • "copies in the country." → "copies in Australia."
  • "to ultimately reaching its final peak of number two" → "to number 15, going on to reach its peak of number 2"
  • "November 4, 2000; similarly to the charts of other nations and" → "November 4, 2000, similarly to the charts of other nations, and"
  • "on the chart for" → "on the
    UK Singles Chart
    for" with the wikilink
  • "where it peaked at" → "charts, on which the song peaked at"
  • "it was certified gold" → "the song was certified gold"
  • "copies in the country." → "copies in Sweden."
  • "in the US and it is" → "in the United States and stands as" per
    MOS:US
  • Pipe Hot Dance Club Songs to Dance Club Songs
  • "at number 24 and 27," → "at numbers 24 and 27,"

Music video

Development and synopsis

  • Img looks good!
  • "helped with the creative direction" → "was responsible for the creative direction"
  • Remove wikilink on MTV
  • "made an appearance in" → "makes an appearance in"
  • The among other dancers part is not sourced, but him being a bartender and behind Martin is so mention those things instead
  • "as the beginning" → "which was at the beginning"

Reception and controversy

  • "station cut the scenes" → "stations cut the scenes"
  • "to more mature one." → "to a more mature one."
  • "it won the" → "it won the award for"

Live performances

  • Good

Cover versions and appearances in media

  • Mention that season three was in 2008
  • Introduce David Hasselhoff's role on the show
  • "gave it a performance on" → "delivered a performance of "She Bangs" on"
  • Mention that season three was in 2020, while mention series seven being that same year
  • Lowercase the B-52 per
    MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "and was ranked as one of" → "Wagner was ranked as one of" as a new sentence, as the current one is too long

William Hung version

  • Introduce who William Hung is in the first sentence
  • "singing and dancing, and Simon Cowell" → "singing and dancing; judge Simon Cowell"
  • "the "best track but" → "the "best track... but" per the source
  • "of the song was" → "of the song is"
  • The joint performance of the song was at the Monte Carlo Theater in Las Vegas, so reword accordingly
  • "performed the song" → "performed the original"
  • "and explained: "Otherwise I" → "and explained that "otherwise I"

Formats and track listings

Credits and personnel

  • Brackets are missing closure for Indianapolis
  • Despite being sourced here, Glenn Monroig, Julia Sierra and Daniel López are not mentioned as songwriters in the infobox for some reason

Charts

Weekly charts

Year-end charts

  • Good

Certifications

  • Good

References

  • Copyvio score looks decent at 32.0%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Ref 1 needs to cite the original URL too
  • Ditto for ref 2, plus the archive does not seem to work for me
  • Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) and Nielsen Business Media to Nielsen Holdings on ref 4
  • Remove pipe on Billboard for ref 6
  • Middle names should be cited directly after the first ones for refs 15 and 19
  • Change MTV to MTV News on ref 20, citing as publisher instead
  • WP:OVERLINK
    of Nielsen Business Media on ref 44
  • If ref 52 is a dead link then it can be kept per the GA guidelines, but is this really the case or is it the wrong URL? Also, remove the publisher.
  • Pipe Terra Networks to Terra (company) on ref 53
  • Remove or replace ref 56 per
    WP:RSP
  • Ref 57 and ref 51 are duplicates
  • WP:OVERLINK of Univision on ref 61
  • Wikilink Daily Mirror on ref 64
  • Ref 70 should be dated in 2008 not 2006
  • WP:OVERLINK of Entertainment Weekly on ref 72
  • Remove or replace ref 79 since it is unreliable, as looking at the URL cited from 2004 and scrolling through the homepage of current articles shows literally the same author for all of them, plus this looks like a gossip site
  • Remove ref 111 since AllMusic is not reliable for peaks
  • Pipe Fundación Autor-SGAE to Sociedad General de Autores y Editores on ref 116, unless that is not the correct article

External links

  • Good

Final comments and verdict

  •  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; glad to have reviewed this twice! --K. Peake 10:10, 6 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • آرمین هویدایی You still need to write out the songwriters and producers in the background section per my comment about the lead's content being in the body but otherwise, nice job on implementing the suggestions! --K. Peake 17:17, 7 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • آرمین هویدایی ✓ Pass now, I did make a fix where you had not listed the full stage name for the second mention of one of the songwriters. It is a great contrast for me to have gone from the failure of the first review to this one's pass; I'm sure the original nominators will be so proud of you and me somewhat too!!! --K. Peake 20:21, 7 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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