Talk:Shelter (Finneas song)/GA2

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:43, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Nice to see you so active again! I will wipe this review out very soon...

Infobox and lead

• Finneas → Finneas O'Connell under songwriters
• "It was released by" → "The song was released by"
• Target single to Single (music)
• "He wrote the song" → "Afterwards, he wrote the song"
• Mention in this same para info about the song's lyrics
• "A music video for the track was" → "A music video for "Shelter" was" with the wikilink
• "shove him and toss him roughly." → "shove and toss him roughly."
• "throughout October 2019," → "throughout October 2019 to support Blood Harmony,"
• "his tour including performances of the track." → "the tour including performances of the song."

Background and composition

• "written back in 2016." → "written back in 2016 by Finneas."
• "Finneas had heard that" → "He had heard that"
• "Avicii, was looking for" → "Avicii was looking for"
• "Finneas wrote the track" → "Following on from this, Finneas wrote the track"
• Only [2] needs to be at the end of the "confess" sentence since the other sources are irrelevant
• "as the third single on" → "as the third single from" with the target
• Remove wikilink on Blood Harmony
• "and streaming through his record label" → "and streaming, through his record label" with the wikilink
• The pop track sentence should start the second para
• "described the track as" → "described "Shelter" as"
• ""Shelter" features" → "The track features"
• Target Latin to Latin music
• "gospel choir effect[s] during the chorus," → "gospel choir effect[s] that appear during the chorus," with the targets
• "reverb’d handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment" → "reverb'd handclaps, bluesy vocal embellishment," with the target and wikilink
• Target bridge to Bridge (music)
• "And further comments the song is" → "He further commented that the track is"
• Wikilink acoustic guitar
• "melody" that is very" → "melody", which is very"
• Add release year of "Shape of You" in brackets
• "is set at a dance tempo." → "is set in a dance tempo." with the wikilink
• Merge the final para with this one in the new order
• "is about a love for a girl that brings" → "is about a lover that brings"
• ""They call us" → "He represents the trouble with the lyrics, "They call us"
• "for the track only gets more urgent as it continues." → "of the track becomes more urgent as it continues:"

Critical reception

• "received mainly positive reviews" → "was met with mainly positive reviews"
• "noted that Shelter was" → "noted that "Shelter" was"
• "he produces for his sister [Billie] [Eilish]"." → "[Finneas] produces for his sister [Billie Eilish]"." and add the wikilink to her in the way that it is done
• "while he mentions that it's" → "while mentioning that its"
• "stated that with "Shelter" it" → "stated that the song"
• "and calls the production" → "and he called the production"
• Wikilink
  MOS:LINK2SECT
• "mentions the song" → "mentioned the song"

Promotion

• Wikilink music video
• "was directed by Sam Bennett and was uploaded to" → "was uploaded to" to avoid repetition
• Remove the word "official"
• "while shot in" → "while it was shot in"
• "It begins with" → "The visual begins with"
• "through the Los Angeles river" → "along the Los Angeles river"
• Remove the "wearing" part since that is totally unsourced
• The lyrics that Finneas is quoted as crying are not the ones that 14 instates; fix this
• "turn to shove and toss him roughly around the riverbed." → "try to tug and toss him roughly around the empty riverbed, as well as mobbing him."
• "Grease and praised the choreography," → "Grease, while praising the choreography,"
• "he performed from the EP" → "from the EP that he performed live"
• The tour info is not backed up by the ref
• "In October 2019, Finneas perfromed" → "In October 2019, Finneas performed"
• "the Austin City Limits Music Festival and was backed up" → "the Austin City Limits Music Festival, being backed up

Release history

• See
  MOS:TABLECAPTION
• Format → Format(s)
• Digital download and streaming should be separated in the table

References

• Copyvio score looks great at 11.5%
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Fix
  MOS:QWQ
  issues with ref 3
• Ref 6 is not the correct ref, since you should be citing one that verifies the release of the song as a single, not its music video's release and cite various retailers with the countries in brackets

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold after reviewing this short article, though it is quite close to the criteria.

The Ultimate Boss This looks a lot better, but there is still no source for the song being performed on tour. --K. Peake 07:50, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

talk) 08:03, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply

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The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, good job! --K. Peake 08:08, 23 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]